Confucious says
give her pretty flowers
hug, kiss for hours.
Confucious says
give her chocolate candy
she'll think you're dandy.
Confucious says
give her a diamond ring
forever she'll cling
Confucious says
give her lots of champagne
more kisses she'll rain
Confucious says
give her a wet mop
Your head she'll bop
Confucious says
give her a new straw broom
far away she'll zoom.
Confucious says
give her queen size panty hose
she'll punch your nose.
Confucious says
tell her she is getting fat
she'll say, here's your hat.
Confucious says
take her on a four month cruise
no snooze, lots of schmooze.
Author notes
Marital advice
Written February 25th, 2005
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thanks for the entry
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This piece had humor, truth in relationships, and a fantastic flow. I loved the form and how you kept up the Senryu's without forcing them. I do advise a correction though. In stanza four, I think that you meant "Confucious". Otherwise, this piece was perfect...and 13 words of advice? I love that...my lucky number. I do agree...no buying queen sized panty hose or speaking about added weight...if that were my boyfriend or future husband, he would be sleeping on the couch or out of my life. LOL! Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing! Also, good luck in the contest!
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Your a Finalist!*rose*
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I fell in Love
with this Completely and More!
Good Luck in the Contest!
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Did you know
one of your "Confucious Says" came out "Conscious says"? Just curious! (It's the line about Champagne! How appropriate!) -
omg this poem was very cute it made me laugh..
glorious! thanks for sharing!keep writing -
very cute write here and I guess a cruie would do it
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Enjoyable!
Hahaha!!! These were such fun and a great delight
My favourite is the diamond ring one{lol, diamonds are my birthstone and I have 8 on right now}
Charishma -
HA HA! I think I'm still a bit young for Marital Advice, but I think I'll just have to show this to my dad...just because. Great job on this, I really like it because it rhymes!
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