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Funeral Sky




Blue and white painted
sky, the moon shining through. Birds
sing mournful good-byes.

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For my great-grandma.
Written February 24th, 2005

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  • Bob-is-never-alone
    June 12, 2006
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    usually not a fan of haiku, but this one captures me.


  • Kaleidoscope Sky
    July 28, 2005
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    You wrote a beautiful poem in rememberence of your grandmother.

  • Turquoise Tortoise
    July 16, 2005
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    I am very sorry for your loss. It made me feel kinda scarred, cuz my grandma has been real sick lately.


  • July 10, 2005
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    A very solemn haiku. Beautifully done.

  • Crystal Clear
    July 6, 2005
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    Oh, I am very sorry you lost your grandma. I remember when I lost mine. It didn't seem real, because I was far away, and could not go to the funeral, so at least you got to give her the final good-bye.

  • Air Head
    July 3, 2005
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    Sounds like a beautiful day for someone's spirit to fly with the bird songs up to heaven.

  • Danara Strong
    July 2, 2005
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    Sad haiku. Well written though.

  • AngieBaby
    July 1, 2005
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    Your image is clear, as is your message.

  • Sequoya Red
    June 30, 2005
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    Oh my, I guess I should have been prepared for a sad poem when I clicked on one titled "Funeral Sky" but this really put a lump in my throat.

  • RandomInertia
    June 27, 2005
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    This is very touching. I am sorry for your loss.


  • mireflejo
    June 12, 2005
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    thats beautiful, words wont do it justice.xx

  • social-chaos
    March 12, 2005
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    Excellent

    The imagery in this poem is amazing! It is short, but wonderful! Great job with this!!

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