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Me

I know this girl,
Just plain an ordinary,
She loves to sing and dance,
And admires the word romance.
She's nice and sweet,
But can be bad, sour, and petite.
This girl stays to herself,
Unless she's pissed by someone else.
She's always dreamed of being in a band,
Singing her way to fame, becoming rich,
And going to Graceland.
But her dream will never come true,
She just site's back an writes a poem or two.
She writes about love, she writes about sadness, wealth, an madness.
But she's cool an fresh,
Has a good time, Sometimes the best.
There is many things I can say about this girl,
Maybe later but not right now
Cause this girls gotta go.
"This girl is me."

Author notes

Written February 24th, 2005...Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious.5

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  • star wars fanatic
    October 15, 2007

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    She just site's back an writes a poem or two.
    typo: sits

    The flow was a bit awkward. I feel like it needs to be balanced out a little. See what you can do with evening out the syllable count and let me know where you get and then I'll give more specific advice.


  • Blondita
    September 25, 2007

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    This poem does nothing for me whatsoever. Sorry. I can't relate to it in any capacity. It's full of cliche's, poor diction, no attention to syntax etc. You utilise the word 'petite' as if it's a personality trait.It just doesn't make sense in context at all. Thanks for entering :-)


  • kiwikrazi37
    July 31, 2007

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    Hehe very well written. I liked the ending. And in the beginning, you started to sound like me! Up until the line about going to Graceland. I'd rather live somewhere like California or North Dakota Nice work, thank you very much for your entry