Baby I believe one thing tis true
That you belong to me and I to you
And yes I believe in love at first sight
Cuz it happened that cold homecoming night
And yes I believe that I have true love
That god put us together, a sign from above
And yes I believe that you love me too
Cuz you say w/o me you wouldn't know what to do
And yes I believe in the afterlife
Where we still will be husband and wife
And yes I believe I'll be w/ you for all of time
Even if I'm old, fat, and whine
And yes I believe we'll have a happy life
Even though we will have some strife
And yes I believe I'll die by your side
But when you leave this world, I'll meet you w/ arms open wide
02/08/05
@home
8:08 pm
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Written February 23rd, 2005
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I like this a bunch..I do beleive in first sight..I have been there and done that and I am loving every bite of it...Life is great at times and life sucks at times..but that is life and the only one that can make it better is you and the one you love..And they love you back and they as well wants it to work..Anyways you did a great job at tell this person how you feel..Great work!
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John
Thank you for your comment. I will, in the future, not shorten my words.
XOXO
~laura -
Cold,
glad you liked my poem and feel free to send it to your g/f; just give me credit!
XOXO
~laura -
Laura, this was really nice. Personally, I don’t particularly care for the shortening of “with” and such in the lines. It just feels like it takes away from it. Just my opinion hun. But I feel that something like this deserves the full version of the words. Nonetheless, you did an excellent job with this.
~ John
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First of all, Happy eairly bday,
Nice poem. Flowed so well. I can flip it and put it for my gf. -
Glad you enjoyed eddy.
XOXO
~laura -
Very sweet...
Eddy -
Sorry about the abbreviations, i will try to stop that..bad habit. Glad you like my work, my dear.
XOXO
~laura -
Okay Nick,
You remind me of one of my dear crazy friends but anyways, thank you for reading my work. I will try to read some of your work though. I'm a nice person i suppose, from VA, and a chick and 17. Check out my page if you'd like.
XOXO
~laura -
awesome
very good, touching, and good. i sux at making romantic poems you can check out one of my sad attempts at my page. what kind of music do u like? i like heavy metal and pretty much anything but i hate country and dont really like rap. it would be great if u replied to this comment. errrrr! i have to write two more full length comments to post another poem and i dont want to. so tell me about you. i live in NH and am a guy and im 14. im also really random and bored alot. sheep giraffe sofa toaster butter on toast and cheesy sofa chouch folder paper cafe dog cat house smoke. Ok im done with being random now.
its
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fun
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Laura, it is clear that you've opened the pipeline between heart, mind and pen. Wonderful job my dear, although I would prefer it without the abbreviations, but somehow you've made it work for you!
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Thank you so much, my friend, watuwant, for reading another one of my writes. I shall try my best to write 3 a day once again.
XOXO
~laura -
In the 10th line, it should be will instead of well.
12th line, put an A in front of whine
Just two little editing tips. Othewise, another fun read. Three poems in one day! WooooHoooo, you've got your muse on!
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nice write
ZYI,
Why thank you much. Glad you enjoyed.
XOXO
~laura -
tis beautiful
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