this was only a dream
I did not make it this far
i've been blown off the map
shot away
like a star
i knew that it meant nothing
so why arent I still breathing
if i knew it was only .. just
that was all it was meant to be
one night of sex and lust
you tore into me
made me scream out loud
then it was all over
and you- you're only proud
that you got me
to give it all to you
i know im just a fool
but i just cant get overmyself
and hey look, im worthless
shocked and unhappy now
sexed up, dragged around
you turned my whole being
upside down
and you forced me to choose
between living like it .. or nothing
i cant remember the rest now
i think you said something
along the lines of using me
just one more reason
for me to now be
this time i've fallen
and i wont get up
i promise you that much
i have had enough
but fortunately for your sex drive
im not as brave as that
so you know - call me anytime
i know thats all i am
but you never know - sometime
you might want me for keeps
but until then i know
that im your whore slut bitch skank
who lives forever
down below.
Author notes
just, you know, more evidence that i hate everything
Written February 23rd, 2005
A contest entry
- Make me speechless by DancingGypsy.
300 points, ended June 11, 2005, 25 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh my... I haven't read anything this piercing since... hell alone knows when... I love it. It's left me speechless. Well done!
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I hate guys that do that. First step : whoop his ass. Second step : leave him. Third step : move on!
Yes, okay so about the poem. It was an awesome poem and you proved your point well. The imagery was excellent. Great write, keep it up!
~Vladd -
This is awesome. I love the description and feeling it gives off. I like the title. Anyway, good job and congratulations on the contest.
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Congrats
amazing use of emotion and imagery. I really enojoyed this poem. Keep up the amazing writing -
this was amazing, but i almost went through something like that, could have been sexed up and used, treated like a nothing, only i had a choice.
since i can relate, it definitely hit home hard, i'm sitting here thinking, "that could be me"
this was full of emotion and it had great imagry. good luck in judging your contest.
-meg -
good poem, it was a little chilling to be honest but thats the way i like my poems lol
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Absolute
totally awesome poem fantastic emotion really good job keep that up!!! -
lives forever down below................
this is strong.
a "sexy" piece. -
Dont ever give up on what you believe and i can tell you believe in your poetry you are great. never give it up. You could be famous some day soon
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*whispers* wow
wish i was down below
*revives vertigo*
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