sun sets below sky
turning sky into night time
stars shine bright above
Author notes
My first haiku
Written February 23rd, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Hiaku by Sarah957.
300 points, ended June 13, 2005, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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A cracker. 5/7/5 and a real haiku about nature!
Applause, love and hugs. XXX
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I love Haiku's and I love this one as well. your words went perfectly with the picture provided!!!
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Amazing picture and a great descriptive haiku to match it.
I can't believe you have only written one though.
I was just returning the favour as you placed a lovely comment on my daughters work, and I saw your list.
Please write more haiku.
Chris and Erin (Emgns).
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Thankyou for your lovely comment, one day I'll try another Haiku, I'm learning Sonnets at the moment.
I'm pleased Erin did well in my Grandson's contest she is going to be a great poet as she matures.
Joan
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this is soooo cool aj. the pic was great too.
loves ya.
Til
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The picture you have with this is just beautiful! Congrats on your first hiaku! It just may turn out to be addicting!
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Beautiful/Great job Joan, I love this haiku. I hope that you are going to write more of them.
Damon D. Brewer -
Congrads Joan...the picture is perfect, the words are fitting and the haiku is moving. No other comments except nice to see your branch out and try a few forms. gregg
my 
Aussie 
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As soon as I saw the title of this, and saw that there was a picture to go with this, I said to myself, this picture is going to be beautiful. And it is-and it matches the poem amazingly. For your first haiku, for ANY haiku, this is really nicely written. Great imagery
I love the transition that the poem holds, the title fits well. How it turns from the sun to stars is a very pretty thing-both in the sky and your poem. Thanks for sharing
~blessings~
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Excellent
WOW! This is a spectacular Haiku! Your picture is absolutely beautiful. Makes me miss watching sunsets sitting on a boulder looking out to the Gulf at Galveston Island.
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PERFECT! The skill of your words and the asthetic beauty God so adequetly displays in the skies work so very well together to produce a beautiful work of art in this haiku. Haikus are my most favorite form of poetry and you make me love them even more with this beautiful example. Just PERFECT!
Your Sister/Friend
I LOVE YOU Dearly,
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This is a beautiful haiku and an absolutely stunning picture. It takes my breath away.
S♥m
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A/J I am sooooo proud of you I knew you could do it. This is wonderful and a Grrrrreat job for your first haiku. I hope to see more. all my love Mia
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This is beautiful Nice work for your first. The picture is gorgeous. Good job, poet... and keep writing
~Smidge~ 
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