bloody beaten hazy the view
to my anguish you subdue
My tears sink trough
mixing with blood you drew
My demise you view
Black and blue
Author notes
not my best work I'm going to try and work on it more but I gave it all my head will allow me at this time
Written February 22nd, 2005
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Love it does not come by fists
or words as sharp as knives
Love it has a gentle touch
and something that is quite nice
Denial often is your end
when truth, it can't be seen
See the action of love's game
and leave if it turns mean
Keep penning
Hugs...Eddy -
thanks lost...I tried to get out what I felt.
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well I just went on things going on in my life at this time...thanks for the comment
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great
I agree with Shameless1. It is short but has a very strong message. Great write. You protrayed the feelings very well throught ur words -
I enjoyed reading this....it may not be your best work..but its the first piece of yours I've read...so I'll just go off my initial thoughts...I think for a short piece it has a very strong message and is full of very visual descriptions...not that I enjoyed the pictures I got when i read it..but it was good enough to inspire visuals from your words...well done
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