>>>This is not for you<<<
i...
i
p * o * i * e.
r * m * s
I.
the
skin
unfurled
from slim
wrists like
petals. She
saw so much,
too much,
to force
smiles
now.
The
Valley
is burning,
the sky came
tumbling down,
the skyskrapers
frightened her.
she couldn't
seem to see
why some
things
don't
feel
the
Rain is
falling as I
see her today.
Staining my face
with tears I cannot
shed. They're still
caught in your longlong
lashes. darling, You
were too beautiful,
too real, to
last. you
Never even
knew...
I
lay
this rose
on your grave.
in rememberence
of glassy eyes, &
shaking hands,
you never
let me
hold..
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& (almost)
w
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II
The petals dance upon the breeze [but my love will not] those orchid blossom violet eyes will never light the sky and we're unstringing the stars from her hair. She was buried with razor blades and glass, angel eyelids closed on violent-violet eyes and she doesn't see me
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III.
purging myself of lips that lifted hymns and the lavender scent you twined into my hair. Shaking the stain of your beauty out of snow covered lashes -i loved, though we never
to u c h e d.
Author notes
kels - i'm not your creepy lesbian stalker either 
love you!
the shaped things are supposed to be petals, but allpoerty formatting has brutally murdered that... the long thing is a stem...........
like i said, an assignment
Written February 22nd, 2005
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lol.. mary jane
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legend-great
That is amazing!!!Im so adding you to my fav list. -
Yes, I have his jacket... and you can smell it, but um, I already washed it... lol. Sorry, it was smoky and probably sweaty.
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OH MY EFFING GOD HOW DID YOU GET HIS JACKET...GEEZ...I WANT TO SMELL IT..AND THEN HAVE AN ORGASM WHILE WEARING IT..BECAUSE OMG HE IS SO HOT...BUT LIKE...I CAN EITHER WASH IT AND THE SCENT OF LUDO MAN WILL DISAPPEAR...OR YOU CAN WEAR A JACKET THAT HAS HAD ITS SHARE OF ORGASMS...anywho yay...oh..and megs poem...lol...this was good meg....I would recommend changing the name and taking out the things that say what part of the assignment it is...because this is naturally beautiful...and i hope that made sense because i just made love to mary jane
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I have no words, Meg, no words, other than wow. Wow so doesn't cover it. Breathtaking.
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HOLY SHIT! LUDO'S JACKET!?!?!?!
i bow to the wow of the brenna.
i like the 2nd part best. OH! and if i dont' get a cigarette soon i'm going to "unfurl the skin from slim wrists like petals." - lol. I'll give more meaning to the freakin phrase.
OMG! You're my dove too! We are lighthouse-in-maine-doves!
mi amore!
kiss kiss!
-meg
oh, thanks for the correction. you were .. umm.... correct, -
Ahhh. I do see that all three parts have been finished. That second part had been at the bottom and I kept wondering if you'd written it because I really liked it. I thought maybe you put that on there because that's where the assignment came from...? But now I realize it's yours and I'm glad because it was gorgeous. I do have one question about this line:
"we're unstringing the stars she from her hair"
Is that 'she' supposed to be there? Just wondering... it felt like you either added the 'she' or left out a word. But I will kindly accept it if that's how it was supposed to be.
Dude!!! I have the lead singer of Ludo's jacket!! I HAVE HIS JACKET!!!!! HOORAY!!!!!
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hey, the poem is complete now. all three parts... *hint*
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This was a beautiful poem with a beautiful picture hehe. Anyway, I loved the imagery and everything. The poem was incredible. Also, the petals worked out, they still looked pretty.
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well you better be back!!!!
I don't accept HALF-comments
Edited on Feb 23, 7:35 p.m. because ''. -
Megan, darling, I thought it was
beautiful.
And the petals still worked out. I wasn't sure what they were supposed to be at first, but when you told me, I thought, "Yes, this is nice; I like it."
It was a wonnnnnnderful poem. I loved how you repeated the beginning, the slimpetalswrists and she saw too much... mmmm. I will have that cake with roses and eat it too.
Oh my gosh, you left me the most awesome comment EVER!!!! And you're right--you're Katrina. And also, I'm the main character girl (I can't ever effing remember her name! geeze!). I saw you were almost done. I liked "Annie on My Mind" better. You can ask Lindsey for it when you're done. It's sad. I thought it was, anyway. It made me want to cry. It is sooo good. Mmmm. Here's some more cake for me.
Hey. Squirrels. Coconut yogurt. He he.
I don't like Cherokee in Weetzie Bat. I don't like her when she gets Raphael and poor Witch Baby is left to smolder, ash, and drift off. I don't like Raphael because he acts so blind, as if he couldn't tell Witch Baby liked him. How stupid. Men. Argh! I want Witch Baby to find someone better than dumb ol' Raphael. Someone named... Zeke. That's a cool name. He'll be all sensitive and pale and skinny. Sounds like my type. lol
Ahhh. I shall see you tomorrow, my dove.
I called you a dove! Hooray! We are doves.
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Wow! This is great! and even though AllPoetry screwed up a little bit, they still look like petals falling. Whose class was this for? You truely amaze me dear.
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I really expect that you will get an A on this one, such beautiful work. The words are very beautiful and the pictures that they formed were just breathtaking. You are a true genius.
Tiffany -
SCHWEEEEET!
holy shit! this rocks! (please pardon the language) but this is a crazy awesome piece of prose. i love the emotion, the images, the theme, the flow, the tone, the diction, everything in this entire poem is friggin awesome! wow! u moset definately deserve a big ole clappy man! great write! awesome!!!!!! -
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Ohh, the AP format didnt do that badly with it. I didnt know what it was and after the second... stanza... I said, hey, looks like someone playing "he loves me, he loves me not" with a flower. Again, awesome form, beautiful imagery. :::Loss for Words::: -
lovely homework.
beautfiul write, I very much enjoyed it.
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allpoetry formatting can be frustrating - but i really like the idea behind the shapes you were trying to accomplish. and this is a great piece. i really loved the second to last 'petal' and beautiful word choices throughout the whole piece. refreshing and lovely to read. thank you for sharing! keep up the great work <3
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