...I'm lost
In a pool of hate
And I can't swim.
...I'm lost
I don't know where I am
...I'm lost
No one is around to help me
...I'm lost
I can not be found
...I'm lost
No one looks for me
...I'm lost
Some one please help me
...I'm lost
There is no where to run
...I'm lost
I will never know what love is
or what it feels like
...I'm lost
In a pool of hate
And I can't swim.
...I'm lost
A soul that will
Never see the light
Of day or to know
What it is like to
Be free.
...I'm lost
And no one can rescue me
...I'm lost
No wait I'm not lost!
....I am just dead to
to the world....
The voice that was never heard....
Author notes
My Favorite song is "Dead Bodies Everywhere by KoRn"
Written February 22nd, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything # 1 by Lucky 2006.
300 points, ended March 15, 2006, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like how you set this poem up and I like the background for this poem... Keep on writing I have read your poem...
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Amazing!!!
I fucking loved this..holy fuck..wow amazing sorry bout the swearing but it's great..i loved the last line..it is an exciting poem and wow..i don't know what to say..keep up the good work..wow..good luck in the contest.
If you don't mind could you plz comment on one of my poems..thank you
~Sae~ -
I love the repetative line you use over and over again, really makes every other statement bold and stand out! It was like i was travelling through a fantasy, a dark, lonely fntasy....I enjoyed this peice thoughroughly!!
~Christina-Marie~ -
very well expressed we all feel lost at times in our lives I think that is when we need to stand stronger than ever raise our voice and step out of the shadows kind of like a damnit! notice me world attitude.
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~Lena~ -
damn Angel .. lol .. I dunno how many times I've felt like this myself .. very deep, emotional write hun .. i loved it and really enjoyed reading it .. thankyou so much for entering and i wish you all the best in the contest .. keep the ink flowing hun
~Aimee
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Thank you all so much. It means a lot when ppl comment on ppls work!
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awesome write
Great peom, really deep. I love the repetiton of 'i'm lost' it's really effective!
I really like the line:
'I'm lost
In a pool of hate
And I can't swim.'
It really makes you see it in your mind, awesome. The last line:
' The voice that was never heard'
This also really does this too.
great poem you really get your point accross.
keep the ink flowing.
SxX
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WOW !!! i think this is brillaint the change from the repeated "Im Lost ..." ( which creates power on its own by the way ) to the "Im just dead... " nice work , really powerful , makes a great read , sad story though !!
!! hope that you get found and someone listens to what you have to say 
!! Nice work
Jordan x
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Well I'm hoping that someday you become found. Sometimes it's just a matter of the right time. Sometimes age brings about change. Thanks for entering my contest.
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i fuckin love this ! lol ..specially the last few lines there awesome..i totally understand what ur feeling !
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I love this poem. I especially like the last line: "I am just dead to to the world.... The voice that was never heard...."
I can relate to this. For years I have felt dead to the world. Just felt like some sort of walking ghost. Anyway, good job. Keep up the good writing.
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