Father
Your words did never lie
But your actions speak louder
Can you tell me why?
Father
You taught me of my tune
And left me to explore
You would come back soon
Father
You said you loved me
I dare not listen longer
For you left me be
Father
I hoped to believe
To get to know you more
How can you deceive?
Father
I could only love you
But all I hear is your laughter
Not "I love you too"
Author notes
I was thinking, and I kinda thought that maybe that person that will never love me back, doesn't have to be a "lover" or "partner". So I thought of my father, because he's the person whose love I doubt the most.
(He never expressed the slightest care for me)
Don't read the picture as though he is dead, he is not, I have simply "burried" him as a part of my past...
Written February 22nd, 2005
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A contest entry
- Broken by Sun Shower.
375 points, ended April 25, 2005, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I don't really have a close relationship with my father...We don't get along but he's the only parent I have. I've isolated myself from him and rely on another man completely outside of my relation all together. I hope that you find peace.
Rosita -
that is a very interesting way of looking at this, i honestly didn't expect it, but i like it non the less and it is very creative so thank you for entering. also i just thought the part you said about "i have simply 'burried' him as a part of my past" that was interesting, and unique i liked it.
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as blanketoflove said up there^, exceptional piece of work. i can't say that i know how this feels, but i do think this is very well written. keep writing, my friend
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this too often the case with fathers and thier kids . i have written one of my own about my father .. yours was powerfull in its own right and i hope the void between the both of you doesnt deepen before the end .as i hope you can mend the bridge between two broken hearts....
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This is an expecional piece and what a shame he didnt take the time to know and love a heart that even a stranger can see is pure. Wonderful write.
~~~~Love and Light~~~~
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I, too, remember wanting more than anything the simple expression of love from my father: he never was a very "vocal" man. So, I find your work very moving - the emotion behind the stanzas really shines through. It is an excellent piece, and I will definitely go through more of your work.
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This is really emotional...I'm sorry about your relationship with your dad...I've been there with mine as well...Good luck in the contest sweetie
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