I wandered to the Oceanside
Watching as the moment froze the tide
I hope this moment lasts forever
For I never want to leave her
Author notes
The opening poem to my story Oceanside.
Written February 22nd, 2005
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So sweet
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this one actually made me cry. i remeber all to well have having those same thoughts. congrats.
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Good
This seemed very profound and almost surreal. I felt I would have liked to have heard more initially, but after a few readings I think it stands alone really well!
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This is a sweet and lovely piece. Even for so few lines, it had a most wonderful feel. Good luck in the contest!
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I LOVE THIS POEM. It reminds me of my many cruisin experiences. Little words can mean so much!
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Oh what a Thrill
Wow. That was so amazingly written I wished this moment had lasted forever. I know that sounds odd about such a short poem, maybe it is. I am having sanity problems lately. But this was so beautiful. Write on. ~~SpydurPoet~~ -
I like it, it relates to your story. I wish i could write stories, maybe i'll try........I need to do something I've got all these ideas in my head right now and i am going crazy, as if I wasn't before? lol Anyways good job babe.
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This is really good. Thanks for entering
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