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Empty Blood

They rip apart my memories,

And claw at my emotions,

Till I've nothing left but an empty shell.

And I cried, silenty,

Till there was nothing left but a pool of empty blood.

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Short and sweet and to the point.
Written February 21st, 2005

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  • CrimsonKisses
    February 21, 2005
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    Very dark, I really liked it. I agree that it was short and sweet. It had nice imagry. The whole tying the empty blood with the empty shell was different, I've never heard anyone call blood empty, so very nicely done! keep on writing!
    jerrie


  • dolltrashhh-
    February 21, 2005
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    i really liked this alot, just like you said.. short and sweet and right to the point. awesome write i really loved it, i can relate to this also. i hope to read more from you soon, comment on some of my writtings too if you don't mind. you are very talented from what i've read i'll have to check out some more of your writtings. keep writting. -heather