The sky is crying
tears
of refreshing.
Water drops heavily from the sky,
deep soaking, drenching drops
of hope.
Grey cloudy sky makes for
gloom
today.
But for
tomorrow
will the sun dry up the ground and fatten
tender shoots?
Author notes
The pouring rain brings such hope.
This is an experiment with a poem within a poem - a haiku within a free verse. Do you see it?
This won the silver trophy in DevilDemons' contest Level Hard 10/4/05.
edited 9/10/05
graphic taken from www.jakehowlett.com/gallery/photos/rainongrass.jpg
Written February 21st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Level: Hard by Diabolikal Sins.
500 points, ended October 4, 2005, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I love the content it is wonderful. Rain does so many good things for our plants. It a lovely write. I like the hope you have planted in the write. I have know my grey skies I hope sunny day come soon very lovely.
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This is a really beautiful write. It has such a pretty tinkly verse within it, its so perfect!
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Wow, this is amazing I loved everything about this, I'm a big fan of nature! wonderful job, and best of luck to you.
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It's amazing. I love the rhythm of the whole work and I can feel the rain, the mist, and the gloom myself as I sit here in front of the computer. Great picture to use as well.
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i love it! it is just simply so gentle and brings out so much. i love the rain. as it rains now where i live i just feel happy. rain is my happpy place and i love how you wrote about it. beautifuol poem. keep up the good work!
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very nicely put togeather. love the nature involved and the wording is amazing! great job!
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Nature and personal hope, what a wonderful combination Gregg. Your background and picture complimented your poem. Very peaceful and serene. Great write my friend.
Be Well and Be Blessed. 
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I like this one I could visualise the poem with your words and descriptive flair used to introduce each section of the poem beauitufl and enjoyable read.
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I don't know anything about the form, so I don't see anything, sorry. But I will say that I loved the picture, it was really nice looking. The rain does really look rejuvenating and refreshing and I liked that. And as for your poem, even if I don't see the style, I can understand it and relate. I'm hearing ya, and I agree!
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Rain is a beautiful tapestry of happiness in droplets..and the monsoon in India lives upto this image..your poem is water for the throat parched--Shubs
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hmm...I wrote a poem dealing with the rain and tears, maybe you should take a gander at it, by the way I like this poem, Keep it up :0)
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I saw what you were doing right away. I have had ideas to do the same thing; just didn't get around to it.
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I have never experienced rain as beautiful until now. This has excellent imagery and flow. I love it. Thank you for sharing
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Such a lovely picture that creates these wonderful words - nature flows through this, as well as hope and a positive outlook for the future. Well written.
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This is a very nice poem. Good descriptive images.
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What a great way to look at rain.
I see rain baptizing the world in eternal renewal. Afterwards there's always a fresh start.
Jim S -
You are so kind. I too have had a pretty hard life and it's taken me many years to let go of all the "spam" in my life and focus on those things which are really true. Being born again 14 yers ago was really like starting from scratch - with a clean slate. I am stilled awed at how the Lord can do that to a sinner. He loves us so much. You are fortunate because you know the Lord at a younger age. But you still have to walk through this world and it will continually send you "spam" to slow you down and keep you from walking in God's purpose for your life. As far as your writing goes, I will read some more but each one of us is gifted to write in a uniquely and special way. It's your job to discover just how God wants you to be writing. Don't try to be anything except who you are in Christ. In Him, you will find your writer's voice, your writing source, and your purpose for writing. It's such a fantastic journey with Jesus. God bless....I hope I didn't go on too long!
Joanne -
You describe the simplest thing so beautifly. You got a good perspective on life, I love the way you make simple things sparkle with words. You write from your heart and you see things in such an awesome way. I've been trying to write like this, I write from my heart, but not like this, I've had a hard life, so It's hard for me to look at simple things like this and express them with the passion you have. Awesome write, I loved it.
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I like the personification of the sky crying...very creative. Nicely written. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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I live in New Fairfield and teach in danbury - pretty far away from where you are stationed. Thanks so much for the kind comments. I'm new to this site and I love the feedback and the freedom to "publish" what I want. God bless you abundantly!
Joanne -
Wow!! this is beautiful my friend!! I hope you did good in the contest. Why didn't anyone else comment on it?? hmmm.. Anyways, your from CT?? What part?? Just curious cuz Im stationed in Groton. God Bless You my friend!!
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