The glistening show
Of the Sun as she goes
Blue moves to orange
Evening hues in the throes
Fantastic warm feelings
Glad viewing slow dimming
Day shrinking to night
Through the solar system spinning
And that eye never blinking
Watching over me
Silver iris so pure
In control of the sea
And those mirage birds croaking
Ever pervasive but far
As sight in a vacuum
Crystal as stars
Nil sensations defined
Warm breeze on the skin
Cocoons, entwining
Mind expanding, no sin
New darkness so close, so viably neat
One fantastic day passes
Millions more,
Please!?
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just a fool on a hill
Written February 21st, 2005
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smiles . .any 'ol' hill will do it on a moonlit night
currently i am trying to keep up with assignments for uni and my teaching and science degree . . swamped and feeling slow . . lol. .well i better get back to it . . thanks for the note
till then . .keep smiling
mike -
this was like an endless road to nowhere, and everywhere... great poem .. just a fool on a hill ?? - tell me which hill is so inspiring... :-)
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smiles . . big sigh . . .ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
lol... i have changed thje contrast ...try that
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Eeeesh!
Mike, I can't read this colour combo 
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wjat a vivid poem! I loved this. I agree with chibi-kaiyaska, you effect of poem was hieghtened through the use of certain words. I also love how you referenced to your sea again
This piece makes me feel so calm. I wish it weren't a snow-filled cloudy sky- I would love to see a sun set right about now.
I hope you and yours are well. Take care and keep writing!
<3 Laura -
"a fool on a hill" that's an odd comment about your own poem.
Here's mine- I like your usage of certain words because they heighten the effect of the poem [mirage, entwining, viably] Keep up writing...or else lol
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