Tell her you think she is amazing
And don't forget to tell her why.
Smell her hair
And talk to her in movie theatres
Pick her up and pretend you’re going to throw her in the pool;
because she’ll scream and fight
but secretly, she’ll love it.
Hold her hand while you talk.
Hold her hand while you drive.
Tell her she looks pretty.
Let her pay for stuff if she wants to.
Introduce her to your friends as the coolest girl you know.
And look at her in the eye when you talk to her.
Protect her.
Tell her stupid jokes.
Let her mess with your hair.
Look at her like she’s the only girl you’ve seen, even if she says stop.
When she starts swearing at you, tell her you love her.
Let her fall asleep in your arms.
Call her, and call her back if she calls you.
Get mad, then kiss her.
Give her space if she needs it.
Tease her, but let her tease you back.
Stay up with her all night when she’s sick.
Teach her guitar.
Kiss her forehead.
Take her to the coolest places you know,
and then let her take you to even cooler ones.
Let her wear your clothes.
Hang out with her or stay on the phone with her
even if she’s not saying anything.
Be slow. Don’t push anything.
Buy her ice cream.
Make her feel loved.
Kiss her in the rain
And when you fall in love with her, tell her.
Author notes
This wasn't really a poem. It just kinda came out of something i was thinking about. Actually stemming from a dream about kissing a girl in the rain. And how I, would do all these things, but am still not able to get the girl i want. I'm a hopeless romantic, like many others here. Anyways, i liked it, and thought i'd post.
If you found this through the featured box, please, comment, as to not waste my points. But also, i would really appreciate some comments as to what to do with the form of this 'poem', i know it's not great. Anything helps, really!
However, i might add, due to the wave of comments regarding the 'wow, i wish i had someone like this'. I'd like to say, that it certainly hasn't helped me much. I think of myself as a hopeless romantic, especially in the fact, that i've had one girlfriend, in my life. And believe me, i'm not repulsive, i don't smell, i don't smoke, and i'm not overweight (5'9'', 135). It's just disheartening at times, you know?
Written February 21st, 2005
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Gorgeous & Wise... Thank you for sharing, Poet...
Wanda
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Wonderful poem, it's done well, with spectacular goodness, creative word there I know. It's just so wonderful, and is definatly my ideal way of being treated. It's writen well and it's a very beautiful and romantic poem. Awesome job, keep up the writing.
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*sob* *weep*... I believe the writer of this poem is going to experience a renewed wave of female attention... This was so lovely, and such a beautiful sentiment... it kind of makes you appreciate the little things that people do that make you feel loved... i'm going to send this to my boyfriend... (if that's ok) just so he doesnt forget. brilliant x
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great advice a few guys i know could use to learn this knowlegde and maybe a few women too romance almost seems dead
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haha yep, can i have a name and number pronto please
not often guys admit to what they should do! this is good stuff. there was an email goin round kinda similar to this but you've elaborated and it's that much better!! awwwh *sighs* wish i had a guy like the above!
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Such a beautiful poem wow...every guy should take this to heart Seriously though, I'm not usually into free verse but this poem is..just wow. I'm frickin speechless. Great job, definatly bookmarking this one.
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I cant get over how good this poem is. its origional and just plain great.
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My boyfriend does some of those things. I wish he would blurt out "I love you" when I get mad at him. But he has this way of making me feel guilty for something he's done! He's an odd boy, but we have such a great relationship aside from that. He's a good boy. I should maybe show him this... hehehe.
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It's nice all what you have there, I suppose attention is a secret noose for many women.
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Love my mother? Not all of us have such a messed up mind as Sigmund Freud.
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i love it, a great love poem, very light and looks at things realistically. it's also refreshing to know that love your mother so much. TOUCHDOWN
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I agree with the content and feel the same way, but the title is counter intuitive, shouldn't it be something like How to Treat the Woman of your Dreams, A Man's Guide. "Saying the right things" sounds phony unless you mean them.
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This is telling of a real lover of woman. Only one thing you forgot. Someone I loved long ago,and still do,said as a last as a final remark on the phone.Just lay your phone on your pillow so I can listen to you breath.Don't hang up.This drives females crazy.
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I didn't realize that I had read this already until I read it again. This is so sweet and any girl would be lucky to have a guy like this. Keep up the good work!
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excellent, well written
Spoken like a true hopeless romantic (which are hard to find these days. It's a shame that more guys dont think like this. this was very enjoyable to read. -
Excuse me , can I have your address and phone number? like now, this is wonderful you must be a rare breed and I loved this it was wonderful and also clever, tell a woman what she wants to hear and she will catch you a star, please don't forget name and address and phone number, lol, hugs Di
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Honestly, this contains some pretty good advise. It is in the nature of men to take women for granted, especially when we love them. Thanks for the reminder.
Peace,
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i know you don't think that this is a poem, but i thought it was. very sweet and romantic, i smiled the whole time while reading it. don't fix a thing!!!! i loved it. keep up the great work!
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oh so cute! I'm not much of a romantic but I loved it and it makes me feel so warm and fuzzy inside *grins teary eyed* my boy needs to teach me guitar and reply my calls lol he always forgets. form was great it lead from fuzzy to sweeter and more to falling in love. I love it!
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This is such a cute piece. I wish there were guys like you anywhere NEAR where I live. Great job!
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when i first read the title i just had to come and read this (i admit i thought i would be funny or sarcastic) but its just gorgeous. it made me smile, wanna cry and think back, this is one really well and really tender piece, one of the best i have read in a long long time. thanks for sharing..
shanelle -
advice well given... and well written... i will and i do... and you are 100% on the money with the whole shabang.... great write...
billy -
wow this made me smile. it was so sweet. i would love a guy to do all those things to me. great job. i really liked it
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Buy her ice cream.
Make her feel loved.
Kiss her in the rain
And when you fall in love with her, tell her.
This part enchanted me, as well as the title...just too cute and charming...lol...you certainly know the 101 ways to melt a gal's heart.
And I'm so very proud to say that my babydoll must've graduated from your fine school of boyfriend finishing school, lol, because he is all that and more...and this just reminded me that yeah, he DOES really love me...so thank you and good luck to you and whoever is lucky enough to snatch up such a hopeless romantic as you!
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Sounds like the start of how to date book.. I really liked it it was cute and made you feel fuzzy .well done .I think you have some great lines if you wanted to structure this in a more orderly fashion and let it flow better ,The content is great .
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I still love this It really is great. I smile every time I read it. lol nearly a month later I'm still coming back to read it every time I feel like I have to much love to give yet no one to give it too. xxxx
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quite like it
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i love this its totally great. thanks for the let her pay if she wants cause thats a sore pt with me cause lots of guys get offended when i say that lol. but yah this was really good.
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OMG! You know excactly what u r talking about, I am having my boyfriend look at this. Good Job, Keep it up! -Raye
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very good and you have the right i dea its really great how you put it down into words
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Wow I loved this! And it's all so true... I'm bookmarking this and showing it to every guy I know lol Wonderful write. Hopeless romanticism is good! Very nice, says a lot about how to make a girl feel loved
aww!
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awwwwwwww that was very cute Brilliantly written as well Great write, (and thanks for the tips ) xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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Very nicely done! I enjoyed it immensely. unfortuantely doing these things didn't quite save my marriage...but at least I tried hehe
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Yes, a great many of us are hopeless romantic
Dear fellow this was a wonderful piece and I'm glad that I read it. The only thing that I would do is either put a comma between places places on line 26 or remove one them but other than that it was very nice. -
Ah, brilliant! I'd have to say, you've written everything exactly as it should be, and you seem to really know what you're talking about because i'd have to say...that is pretty much what every girl wants. lol If only guys knew rolls eyes Good job, nice write, and i'm bookmarking it.
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Haha wish my crush would say that to me! it was a really well written, i loved the flow. -
it was all nice and lovely. except for the talking in the movies..lol. good job with writing this. enjoyed. was worth the read.
Blu -
I find this sort of hypocritical, as you've clicked on 2 of my pieces, and completely neglected to comment. As to the piece, it reminds me of something, i'll most likely remember later.
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aw that's so cute!!! but im a hopeless romantic, too lol. ah a kiss in the rain... first off, i think that should be the title of the piece. second... make it flow around that. its a great line... but then again, i think there's nothing better than a kiss in the rain... hm... it's supposed to rain here tonight. maybe i can get my boyfriend outside lol wow i'm all mushy now lol
anyway! maybe doing asides in this will bring it together like a poem... like say:
"Hold her hand while you drive.
(....)"
and insert something to your liking there. personally, i like throwing in short examples... snipettes... in with this form. but whatever you can come up with i'm already in love with everything you had to say so you can't go wrong lol.
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lol, thts awesome! i love it!
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All the things you have described are indeed very delicious. The one thing they all have in common, if you will notice, is that they require a man to give up something. His time! They say you can tell what means the most to a person by looking at where they spend most of their time. I think that's prety true. We are all born with a certain amount and when that's gone, that's it. You can make more money, but you can't make more time. You are a very astute young man and I wish for you a love that is unconditonal, uninhibited and reciprocates. Great write!
♥ Kimberly -
lol, i agree with cutie55.. every guy could master women like nothing. this was very sweet, and i loved it, thanks for sharing
-Julia -
This is amazing. You know exaclty what it is like to fall inlove, atleast that is how it sounds. Those things can only be spoken by one who has been there. This is really well written and I think I have to agree with everything that you said. Great job. This is amazing. Keep up the awesome work.
Rivkah -
You Sound like my boyfriend, this is amazing! lol, if all guys did this, then they would have no problem with women....this is really sweet, the way it just flowed togehter and everything..amazing job!
Mandi -
This was so great! BRAVO!!! And it's so true all of that does work... ahhh... great job!
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Aww this was so sweet if you did all this, you would be like the perfect guy! Sigh if only all guys would read this lol. No but seriously, some of that stuff made my heart flutter, and I love the title. You're right, it's not really a poem, but nice job anyway!
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Ok i can't say much about the form because i didn't have a problem with it, maybe it doesn't sound like poetry, but theres so many different varieties that you can't really classify anything. I thought it was really good all the things you said are so true. This is like the perfect guide for any guy who has just got a new girlfriend but hasn't got a lot of experience with women. Fantastic -
You made so many valid points in this. I must admit I was expecting humor when I clicked but this is much better. There are some lines that go better together than others they have the same sort of topic to them. Maybe putting those together might give this the extra umph you are looking for? If not at least break up the last stanza as it seems somewhat seperate from the others. I loved this. I hope this helps you if not I tried!
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i like it
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This was so sweet. Any girl would be lucky to have a guy like this. I think my youngest daughter does. Terrific write. There's a special girl for you out there somewhere.
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I Loved it. I am the same hopeless romantic and these same thoughts fill my head all the time. I love the rawness and purity of the words as they exited your mind. No conjured rhymes or structured form. Just your thoughts and for me that is the way it should stay.
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Well...that's a beautiful poem! I wish I got a poem like that >_< Yay for applause! just a short lil comment, but I hope you love it anyway I love your poetry style, keep on writing!
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Aww this is so romantic and well written, I liked it a lot Good write- keep writing because this was lovely, it reminded me of that 'always wear suncream' song but this one was more romantic Lovely poem, I can't think of how to improve the form- sorry
All the best,
Pozo
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well i dont know what emotion you were trying to get out of this but.... yeah it almost made me cry, then again im a blubbery woman. i thought that the idea was so unique and, i dont know it was just a really good piece.
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This is really great. I do a lot of that to my girlfriend already.. though I am in love with her I think we are too early in our rleationship to say it just yet. Though i cant wait.
You have been officially bookmarked.
This is a really great write. I loved it. it was fun, funny, sweet, and just plain great. Id actually like to post it on my livejournal. if I can get your permission. Ill give you the credit. -
I think if you put a bit of work into the form, to make it different, to make parts of it to stand out more than others (which makes them all stand out more), and have a few more stanzas, then it could perhaps be a poem.
I love the idea though. And gentlemen out there, listen to this lovely romantic. It's feels amazing when a guy treats you so well without you having to ask.
It's sad that you cannot get the woman you want if you treat her such ways. If she is a good person, then I suppose she may simply think of you as a friend (or perhaps a stranger?). Good luck, Romantic,
Two Feet Under.
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