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The Moment Together

Your lips so soft
Your voice so sweet
My love for you is always deep
The touch so nice
Your body warm
My knees tremble
As I sink into your arms
You hold me near
And whisper in my ear
The same three loving words over again
I answer back
And kiss your lips
The timing is right
The mood romantic
As we sit here
Holding eachother
I look up
And gaze into your eyes
To find the answer
Of what is inside
You answer back with a kiss on the lips
That turns into a passion
Of a sweet loving glist
I sit back
And settle into your arms
As we sit here under the beautiful stars
The moment is true
The mood is perfect
This is the first time
Our hearts collided
I love you dearly
And will never let go
Of the moment
When I fell in love with you.

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Acyteline Wishes is a fool, a fool
Written February 21st, 2005

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  • As I Lay Dyingx
    May 10, 2005
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    that was a very sweet poem you did a good job Thanx for entering-Maelea

  • Jordan0725
    March 6, 2005
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    This poem is GREAT..it shows good emotion keep it up


  • Nanase
    February 21, 2005
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    Great poem, especially the rhyme, and the imagery was sweet. Wonderful entry! Good luck in the contest

    Rosie x


  • Lucidique Angel
    February 21, 2005
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    This poem beautifully portrayed the sheer emotion that you felt. It left me astonished and in utter awe. How wonderful it seems to fall in love now that you express it in such a way. What a magnificent write. Good Luck in the contest. I applaud thee.