Tell me that I will be okay
And that you are here to stay
Because last time you left
I cried and turned to death
It has been so long
Since our hearts sang their song
I will never lose you again
My beautiful uncut gem
It hurt me every day
I did not know what to say
My mind, a victim to theft
I am running out of breath
You are perfect in every way
Since my heart gave away
Ever since you came from above
You have always been my hearts love
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Written February 21st, 2005
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Good Write
This is so sweet -
The second stanza is the one for me, love that last line
One hopes that you are better now. A nice write and use of rhyme. last line third stanza could be "now love has gone I am bereft" no offence to be taken, It just sprang to mind.
PUG
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This is a wonderful write. I can feel the pain and sorrow. I interpret this as you broke up and then got back togethe. I hope i'm right on that. It is beautifully written and has a nice rhyme. One thing I did notice is that "Every" in the last stanza should be "ever". But I'm not trying to make you mad its just an observation. Beautiful write!
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Wow, what a great poem. I like how it ryhmed and everything. This poem was sweet in every way possible. Always give love a chance. I did. Love never dies and never will. Keep writing and be happy!
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wow this was wow....i liked it great write!
luv emma
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Good Job
Wow, you must love him alot. I know the feeling.. Em -
good job. very nice. good luck in the contest.
Blu -
the rhyming was excellent and it flowed through my head like one big thought if that makes any sense at all, nicely done
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dude i love this poem!!its so sweet!ur a good poet
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very good
thi si sa very moving piece! very good!
I could feel th eemotions you put into writtng this one!
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Very moving.n Sad and well expressed! :'(
Boohoo.
You really showed the love u had for that person and I would be very touched if i were hm.
Great job!
Lady anairO
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