Coat hanger abortions
Trash can babies
demanding masters
tortured slaves
angelic whores
and sinning saints
fetus soaked floors
embryo covered walls
kids thriving off the media
making it their religion
Parents with closed minds
pushing for perfect children
your own sexuality a sin
conformity the only way
individuality a disease
just do everything they say
Oh how I'd love
to take a hatchet to their heads
To open their minds
by splitting their skulls
make them see the truth
it's not what's wrong
love who you love we've
been held back for so long
Author notes
It's about your sexuality and basicly just how we have to hide it.
It's odd, i know
Written February 20th, 2005
A contest entry
- A wide variety of choices. Please enter! Points up for grabs. by Delicate Fire Water.
350 points, ended March 12, 2005, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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eeeeeeeeeeewwwwwwwww
too young to read stuff like this... >:-p
though i have to admit that the expression of feeling and rhyming was really good. -
wOw, this was pretty damn good! I'll have to read more of your work in the future!
-keep up the great work!
-nicole
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awsome
Damn dude. this was awsome. it really made me think. well ttyl
~~Wish Bear~~ -
brody... a little scary, but definitely an eye-opener. i agree that people these days need to open their minds. this was a good look at society. keep it up.
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Horridly true... which is worse, I think, that something that is fictional horror... worse, I mean, spiritually or societally, not that the poem is worse... heh. But, yeah, again, really good images, powerful, grotesque, perfect for what you are saying. I really like the different portions of the poem, all tying together into one main theme with different parts. Very nice. Keep it up.
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You've hit it right on the head. I love the way you've added other things which people have bad opinions on. Best of luck in the contest.
~Steph~
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hey. this was hard for me to understand at first, but i think it is really cool. good job.
*ashley -
Ouch sounds painful, but i know where you are coming from...I think the biggest influence on a child's life is their parents, so if we must blame anyone it should be them...great write...very scary to me...
thanks for sharing
take care
-Darkness- -
I agree, great write. xox
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Very angry piece...I think I like it.Lol. I totally agree with you though..some people just need some sense slapped into them. Good job and good luck.
~Ryann~ -
awesome trully awesome i loved the whole parents thing and all of it it kinda hurts to read but it was awesome kepp it up
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Ahh, I felt it ended too soon! I know this could have went on for ages, for anger never really ceases, but I also know that this could have standed a few more lines. I could feel the anger in this however, and great imagery. Thank you for entering and good luck. Sorry the comment couldn't be any longer, but eh, I didn't find much that I related to, and yeah, well, you know.
[Kayla] -
Wow, Brody, that's extremely graphic!
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that's interesting, but i like it.
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i actually really liked this...it was dark and kinda agnry.. i loved it...great write... xoxo stac
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Excellent
Hm. A confusing, yet very clear piece. It strikes a chord, though I really can't say with what. Too hard to place. Good write. Keep up the good work
-Audrey -
i feel anger in this. nice work
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