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Stigmatic:

Stigmatic:

I am my own worst enemy.
You are recruited, unwittingly,
To feed my insecurities.
My war, bounces backwards and forwards,
From me to you, before exploding,
Uncontrollably, within my own boundaries.

However…

I am my own worst enemy.
You have been manipulated, unknowingly,
To feed my necessities.
My needs echo through the darkness,
From you to me, before satisfying
The urges, to control, and command

And then…

I am my own worst enemy.
You have been used, unfortunately,
To feed my emotions.
My confidence flows freely,
From me to you, before ensuring
The feelings of guilt and sorrow

But still…

I am my own worst enemy.
I have used and abused the system,
The people and myself.
Being my own worst enemy
Has made me what I am,
Although honest and helpful
I’m still the bastard I want you to see!



© ali-p 2005

Author notes

people have put me on some sort of pedestal because of my gruff scots accent , my size and my forces reputation....

but really I'm a big softy at heart contrary to the belief that there is no heart ...
Written February 19th, 2005

A contest entry

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  • Saraphina
    April 14, 2005
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    Very honest look at yourself and what you project to the world.


  • duana
    March 2, 2005
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    lol. now this poem has punch, and I LOVE the conclusion. I am going to not just bookmark this, but use it as my mantra everyday, lol. You described me so much in this, lol. All personal reaction aside, I am HONESTLY amazed that this did not win the gold- I am shocked in fact. I mean this has punch in the words, the voice...everything about it is just fabulous. Anyway, great job. One applause is not enough.


  • leannewales
    February 28, 2005
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    This is certainly not crap Ali....I always wait until just before judging before I comment...but I had already read it and was very impressed...it is a wide open arms up honest write and I love it's "hits you between the eyes effect"....comments?...well Ali some people have a big network of friends and commenters which is lovely....just because there are few comments on this does not make it bad....in fact it is one of the best entries...and I thank you for it.....leanne xxxx