In another world
I sit
Far, far away
A refuge in my head from the real world.
Words spin past my conciseness
And fall away.
I refuse to let them in.
Unconcerned I sit
And stare out the window
Ignoring the confinements of reality.
The world flies by out side
A blur of collour.
Yellows draped in sunlight
Greens to drown in.
From the corner of my eye
leaps a shape
Somehow wrong?
I look again
A three legged thing?
An orange cat races
Helterskelter
Across the sun baked pavement.
Legs reaching wide.
The hollowness left by its missing limb
Looking ludicrous
Pumping in and out
Makes me think..........
Am I a three legged thing??
Residing in a dream
Have I lost a limb metaphorically?
The cat leaps for safety
In a flower bed.
The real world crashes in
Words penetrate.
I nod and smile
Tell a lie......
"Yes, I'm listening"
Author notes
Written February 19th, 2005
A contest entry
- Two Lines by ILTL4eva7.
350 points, ended February 27, 2005, 50 entries
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Hmm
I liked this poem.
The imagrey was nice, and I like how the end changes from what I was expecting.
I often feel this way on my own, not with listening to people.. just the feelings... with life.
Sometimes it can be some trippy shit.
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Well, you certainly drew me into your day dream..which to me means, this is very well written! Very nice! I liked it a lot!
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outstanding
i like this because you can see what is written. a good poem makes you see and feel the moment. a bad poem just lest you see the writen word -
Thanks for your comment, I really did see a three legged cat while day dreaming in the passanger seat of our truck, my partner was waffleing on about something and I was just sitting there wondering.......... and nodding..... as you do.
thanks again and all the best Bon -
Quite a unique way of taking this title and making the poem fit, or vice versa - tough to be wakened from day dreaming to something like this.
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interesting write. i was confuse by this line "A blurred of col lour." it seems to be an error if its not i dont get the intent. this really gave my imagination a fun ride however.
keep writing,
sal paradise -
I saw the title and thought that this would be an interesting read. I was right. Good job. I thought it was written well.
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