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Old Marilyn, In the Point

Here, past the floating faces
illuminated in the cracks,
Stands a beige girl
Dark hair hinting at her lack of faith
Rolling iris's trying to flatten the system
To Crush the very series of events that history
stands on
Hoping to make our Closed Eyes bleed
While she runs around in Ruin




Author notes

Mehhhh...
Written February 19th, 2005

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  • Naru Flower
    March 17, 2005
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    I' bored. This is just sad. I always comment youe powms, to talk to ya i guess. Miss ya, love yea (Okay i wanna out another poem on thats why lol)
    sammo

  • Hellspars Umbrella
    March 2, 2005
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    Don't you hate it when people leave you crap comments?! I love this. It's just the kind of thing i can get into and relate to. I hate all that straight forward type crap. don't they know that life isn't straight forward? It's like tryiing to look at a three d comic strip without the blue and red glasses. Anywho.. nice poem.


  • Georgette
    February 24, 2005
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    Don't meh good poetry! And this is a good poem. Really really. The title itself drew me in (very original) and 'twas not disappointing. An excellent write.
    Bella

  • Naru Flower
    February 19, 2005
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    okay, i'll stop now

  • Naru Flower
    February 19, 2005
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    all these comments are mine, thats sad..

  • Naru Flower
    February 19, 2005
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    Oh, I spelt spirit wrong...damnit

  • Naru Flower
    February 19, 2005
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    wow. thats long...

  • Naru Flower
    February 19, 2005
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    meh is right. Hello my dear friend. Thank you for your comment. I cherish it. Is it really that good? Anyways, your sister told me to call at seven, I can't, I have to go to that party. But I'll call you tomorrow. Promise.
    I did go to the dance. It was sooooooooooooooooooo much fun. I have a new shirt, straighnted my hair, actually wore eyeshadow fro onece(along with mascara and eyeliner) and those tight jeans. Chris kept saying I look so hot. And then he said I looked like a whore. Shayne did too, but in a good way. Chris taught me how to grind, and he t.j. and shayne all said I was pretty good. I'm so happy. Danced with chris, t.j. shayne(of course) graham, and jay to slow songs. We had a bloody awesome time. OMG THEY PLAYED SMELLS LIKE TEEN SPRIRT!!!!!!!!! Me and selci started screaming and hugged eachother, jumped up and down, screamed some more, jumped more, hugged more, and started screaming the lyrics and jumping everyehere. Sadly, no one knows how to dance properly to that song. Then they played 'you shook me all night long', and we all grabbed arms and made a HUGE circle with everyone, and we were all jumping up and down and shaking our heads, slam dancing and moshing. It was so awesome. And me and sam and shayne went just the three of us and we were jumping, me abd sam were screaming the lyrics, but shayne didn't know them. Then shayne grabbed me and we jumped by ourselves, and he slammed me into people. It was so much fun. We also got to do our YMCA routine. Shayne wanted them to play the Austin POwers theme song cause we have a routine to that too. Anyways, I'll call you and explain everything in greater detail. Also, when am I coming over? We neded to cover that. Bye byes,
    sammo
    P.S.-care to explain your name?

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