Your promises meant nothing,
they rolled lifelessly off your lips.
As a morning fog rolls off the ocean,
just to be burned away by the sunlight.
Those three little words,
put me in a haze of confusion.
Knowing you never mean what you say,
still my heart flutters at the sound.
A voice so soothing,
yet, it shreds my views on love.
A fierce wave of reality,
crashing against the shores of life.
A current of lies rush from you,
flowing painfully over my shattered heart.
Tears stream from my blinded eyes,
washing away the blurred vision of you.
Rays of bittersweet sunlight warm my soul,
rubbing grains of salty truth in my wounds.
As a morning fog rolls off the ocean,
just to be burned away by the sunlight.
Author notes
eh..tell me what you think..if you have any question please feel free to ask.
~Thanks
Management ~
~Real Rainbows Rock~
Written February 19th, 2005
A contest entry
- Emotional, Heart-felt Poems! by Shantell.
350 points, ended March 12, 2005, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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thanks for your comment...I gladly entered your contest...
~Kate~ -
I like how you use fog burning away in the sunlight as a comparison to the love you were experiancing. Thank-you for the entry!
~Shantell~ -
Thanks very much for you comment...yeah I rhyme when I feel like it..I glad you got the message of the poem...
~Kate~ -
wow- very nice piece! i know exactly what you mean... this was a very good way to describe all those meaningless "i love you"s. that's a wonderful thing to hear, but only if it's sincere. i hope i'm not guilty of spewing out false hope in this fashion... i loved the images you created with this piece. i also didn't notice any evidence of rhyme- way to go!! i don't rhyme except on super-rare occasions
great job, best of wishes, and keep up the good work!!
~tyler
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I like the fact you stay real with it all. No holding back emotions or feelings of passion and pain. Shelter yourself in the shadows,but sometimes embrace yourself with some of the moonlight. Stay safe and keep it real.
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Ah man you make me jealous!!! no fair!!! well yes it is but still. why dont i know how to write a poem!? oh well i like this a lot you know how to write good poems!
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Hi there,
This was a great write, I can tell that it had a lot of thought put into it. This was well worth the read. Keep up the great work.
Best regards
Blue moon
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coool one keep it up man !
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So, beautiful... it hurts.
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