The autumn winds blew calm
Awakening a sway, dance,
And rhythm in the trees.
Fanned by loose leaves,
Twirling, swirling around
Tall trunks and high grasses.
The water rippled out its joy
As each tiny leaf kissed
A pleasant, adoring hello
As it landed, safely,
To dance with the lake,
As one and the same.
Fish come to watch the scene
Like an adoring crowd at the ballet,
Touching, nosing, nipping
Each tiny little leaf.
Here upon the lake wide
A friendship from below.
The trees dance on into the night,
Releasing their leaf adornments
As a gift to the lake at their feet.
The lake accepts each new found love,
Wallows in the rippling kisses
And swallows each one whole.
Author notes
5)Nature
Write a poem describing something in nature
Written February 18th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Help yourself, Many Choices, ANYTHING GOES by bloodxnxaccident.
300 points, ended March 28, 2005, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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beautiful imagery, and nice fractal pic too...
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WOW... THis is an awesome write... I love it b/c it is so vivid and full of imagery!!! Awesome job Auntie Erin!!!
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"The water rippled out its joy
As each tiny leaf kissed
A pleasant, adoring hello
As it landed, safely,
To dance with the lake,
As one and the same. "
Thats really pretty.... I love the metaphors in this poem. Awesome write and good luck in thecontest
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Absolutely wonderful imagery. I love your interpretation of it, making me feel like I was right there, that it was through my eyes that it was being written. It has a serene and calming aura to it.
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I loved your imagery and how you used the image as a mature scene. Though, I think I saw more water in the picture. Palm trees over the water, watching the waves roll in maybe...That sounds beautiful...Anyway, I loved what you had hear. It has such a calming feeling to it. I think I'm too attached to the ocean. Maybe that's why I feel there should be more reference to it, but it is your poem A very nicely written one at that.
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True romance between leaf and lake!
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Your inspiration was closely tied to the choice of pictures. I wasn't sure at first, given the colors involved, but it came out beautifully! I liked the whole dance metaphor and the fish's part in the tableau. Best of luck in the contest!
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Wow. That was absolutely amazing. The title is one to draw readers in and the poem was absolutely great. I loved the background you chose to use with this poem as well. Wow. Great poem. Write on. ~~SpydurPoet~~
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Wow, this makes a very pretty picture. I loved your detail. Good luck with the contest!
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The water rippled out it's joy
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Your imagery in this piece is beautiful...I like how you interpreted the fractal into such a beautiful vision of water and nature...Your flow is perfect and it leaves such a serene feeling in the mind of the reader...
"Releasing their leaf adornments
As a gift to the lake at their feet."
Is one of my favorite lines however there are so many within this piece that draw such beautiful paintings in the mind...Beautifully done...Thank you for entering the contest.
Tory Lin
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beautiful
wow! I love the imagery and the flow of this. I could picture everything, and the flow was wonderful. great write and good luck in that contest!
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