Walking hand in hand
Bright stars twinkling in the night
Whispering love stories
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I will be adding more to this as time goes on
Written February 18th, 2005
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You're vary gooood!!!!! i know how it is when you read other peoples work, it makes you feel like an amuter.
i suck at spelling
and yet i can spell that stupid word!! ~~~> spelling
dam
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What a nice thing to say. Thank you!!!
Anna -
How can so few words carry so much power? If only one day I might write with this much energy.
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Very nice haiku Anna, I haven't attempted one yet, one day I will, with a little help, they are very fascinating, this one on love is very beautiful.
Sally
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Very nice Annastacia, this short piece of work. I also want to thank you for your comment on points. It became more clear to me now. Once again: Thanks!!!
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I'll cross my fingers and hope my reply actually takes this time. I tried 3 times before and the server timed out. Anyway....
I wasn't aware of the controversy until 2 haiku poets had it out on one of my poems once..the difference between English haikus and Japanese haikus. To me, it seems that the same rules would apply no matter what the language is. However you word it, or count it....this is a VERY nice piece of work, Anna.
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You are right, I counted twinkling as 3 syllables ( twinkle ling) But reread it and changed the Haiku to
Walking hand in hand
Bright stars twinkling in the night
Whispering love stories
I am a traditionalist when it comes to Haiku being about nature and the syllable count so I had to make it 5/7/5. Thanks for pointing that out to me.
Anna -
huh....now traditional haiku would have been 5-7-5. Except where English is concerned and then they supposedly throw out all the rules just to keep us poor Americans confused!
It seems I'm not the only one the stars are whispering to, my friend. A smoothly flowing piece that relaxed me completely. Thank you.....
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Sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeettt...
Fingers entertwine
Mind slowly bonding to one
As love soon follows
Hugs...Eddy -
3 lines,12 words,1 complete and fully painted picture.
Very solid piece.
Thank you for the nice and romantic feel.
Rodney -
Very lovely my dear!
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Beautiful!
Loved this just as it is! Very nicely done! If/when you add to it, I hope you'll let me know!
♥ Maureen
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A beautiful non-traditional haiku which I liked a lot Keep writing, this was so beautiful and well written- I loved it
All the best,
Pozo
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