suicidal leap
surprisingly soft landing
only one leg now
Author notes
If you can bear yet another haiku, please press the button. If you fancy a REAL change (and like hardcore porn) try www.allpoetry.com/poem/1427521 .
Written February 18th, 2005
In a list
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A contest entry
- Love, Haiku, Humor, and Acrostic by joliemere.
350 points, ended April 15, 2005, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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You are a genius!
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I can't argue with truth.
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Thankyou for awarding my humble effort your GOLD prize! Best wishes from Edna
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ROFL this had me falling out of my chair laughing. I wish something like this would happen to all suicidal persons. They don't lose their life..just are permanently damaged. It would show them how they actually value the life they tried to throw away. Wonderful haiku!! Good luck in my contest!
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another funny haiku...I like this one, I can imagine a cartoon or comedy being made from this...dark at the beginning, but the ending is funny! nice way to make a serious subject more light (lighter...?). Oh, and can you put the option you chose in your author's comments? Thanks
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A sad little haiku, not your best in this competition though but still a good write
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LOL that's kinda sad hehe
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this is light, and tragic! i am wondering whether to feel good that he/she was saved, or to feel bad about him losing a leg, or to mock the foolishness.
You have done really well to present the idea in this haiku.
Thanks for entering the contest and all the very best to you,
Saurabh *.
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