Ah, so here you are again my friend
Today it's way past noon
Most of the time you visit me
Is past the evening's rising moon
Still you try and frighten me
And with empty eyes you peer
But i know that your grimace fails
to haunt an evil...insincere
Your just a lonely apparation
who has somehow lost their way
and i shall always welcome you
your restless spirit...ashen grey
And if perchance the years do pass
at least you will know i am here
just sitting and waiting
Without a fear...when you appear
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Written September 28th, 2002
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Excelllent poem. Keep writing Susan.
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glorious it astounds me -
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Lovely Susan, Some days i am the lonely spirit, some days the person who waits..
Barbsxxx -
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sweet sis, this poem speaks volumes to me . There is a closenness of this poem that parallels my life. -
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I enjoyed this greatly. It is very kind of you to accept the lonely spirit and offer it you friendship. -
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I really enjoyed this ...I like poetry a little on the eerie side...excellent write!!! :) -
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Light and eerie. The mind wonders. -tj- -
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Hmmm this was very interesting. I wonder if the 'friend' you spoke of had symbolic meaning to you...sometimes that is the case. I did love this write, maybe I should drop you a visit, afterall I am an appriation too! lol jk :)
Lovely work on this. -
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LOL@Susan What interesting company you've created here, Susan. A spirited Muse, who knows! -
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:) And a good friend you are - when all others run into the night screaming -
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Enjoyed this one, 'your restless spirit...ashen grey' -Brandon -
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Really nicely written, Susan! Needs a bit of a spell check, but otherwise format good, rhyming scheme follows throughout and tempo is easy to slide along with. -
Thanks Gill
Appreciate it
Susan~~ -
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Brilliant write Sis ...liked this one alot... xxxx~~~GILL~~~ -
Thanks so much for the compliment all of you:)
Susan~~~ -
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Don't you just love that feeling you get...when you are sure that you saw something out of the corner of your eye..but when you turn ...... it is gone. But you KNOW it was there...you captured that feeling so well. Nice one, Susan -
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oh man!!!!!! This is a great write what astronome says beautiful and haunting!!!
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Beautiful and haunting. -
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great poem! I love the spiritual spookiness, I have always been drawn to scary things like that. I could just imagine a haunt lingering behind me (so I turned and looked). Today I though I saw the face of a man reflected back at me from a window I looked out of while I was going up the stairs (BOOOOO!). Anyways as for critical content I love the rhyme and I love the poem, the meter needs a little more work however. I hope this helps :>
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