just look at me and you will see
that I'm hurting relentlessly
broken inside from your razor tongue
just look at me, look what you've done
no thing's really real
no longer can i feel
don't care about my self any longer
look at me, you've made me sombre
hide in the shadows away from my self
don't you care about anyone else
help me escape my identity
let me go, just let me be free
crying my tears in a river of red
now I'm lying on my deathbed
an overdose of sorrow and sadness
your the one whose created this madness
why can't you love me, just accept me for who i am
i know why, its because you don't give a damn
good-bye to you, its my time to go
all because of the love you never could show
Author notes
i wrote this poem awhile ago, about 2 months ago, and i just now found it. so ya i wrote this because i felt like shit and my mom was being a bitch to me.
Written February 16th, 2005
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why thank you very much, i haven't been on this site in a long time so i haven't posted any new poems in a long time, but i'll get 'round to that soon.
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hey this was very good...loved it really...nice work...L8erz Emily..aka Ashfreak
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why thank you very much. i will read your poems later, i promise but bells gonna ring. aaahhhhh
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I like it CradleofManson. Its very rhythmic. I can tell that rhyming just comes naturally to you. Keep it up. I wish I could do that. -
anger,hatred,sorrow, then the all rare overdose , peole don't die as much from overdoses anymore..aaanyway I realy liked this poem , ty for commenting on my song. -Brad
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Good poem with lots of anger and hatred and lack of self esteem.
Great flow and read and it is well worthy of applause.
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i feel your pain and i love you more than what you know hahaha but dont care cuz i will kill you bitch! o ya who wants popcorn ? candy candy candy!
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That's a pretty good poem... was just thinking about something... I'm sure it's not the meaning but I tell you the picture I have from this poem... To me it does appear like someone who used drug and realise that life is shit with it and want to get out of it... but can't until finally this drug he wants to leave behind... kills him in a last whisper and these lines are the profound good bye to drugs and opening some kind of deliverance... no dependance anymore... overdose...
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sorry, whoops i'll change the background. sorry again ^_^
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I am so sorry the background made this impossible to read on my computer, can you change it and I will get back to you,pity, please forgive me but impossible to read. send me im when changed ,all the best
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Love..the deadly addiction..clean hard images but filled with your feelings, cutting us like a knife.
This pain is all too common in our world, but the bleeding heart applauds you.
Great
Peace
Muddy
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