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Sally

you mother fucking poser
you wanna-be-goth
get away from me you bi-sexual fuck
quit sitting so close to me
stay away, just let me be
I'm not moving in with you like you want
are you my friend? i think not
your boyfriends not a vampire
whats wrong with you, you fucking liar
why do you think were best friends?
what kind of message do you think this poem sends
so you think your Gothic, thinks its fun
yet you idolize Paris Hilton
you fucking bitch, quit copying my style
just your life, makes this earth so vile
you were never in a gang so don't fucking lie
All i know for sure, is you need to die
I'm not a lesbian, you stupid bitch
come near me again you'll be in my ditch
you are a fucking hillbilly a fucking country hick
mother fucking son of a bitch, go out and suck a dick
your so nasty, you don't even know
stupid mother fucking fat hoe
you never had weed like you said you did
i can't wait till from my life you are rid
bitch you better quit lying, I'm not kidding around
speak again, you'll never make another sound
I'm not a slave to your fucking demands
so from now on, from my life you are banned

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this is a poem about a girl that i despise, i know its not that good, but thats how i feel abou this person. so ya i dunno hope at least somebody kind of likes it
Written November 21st, 2005

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  • natari
    March 9, 2005
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  • CradleofManson
    March 9, 2005
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    i hate my poetry it is so bad, but i don't care cuz i like to write it so there. lol

  • CradleofManson
    February 21, 2005
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    ya i know guyz. like i told both of you guyz i don't have a problem with gay or bi ppl its just that if they know i'm straight and they still hit on me and shit, then i have a problem

  • natari
    February 21, 2005
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    Ouch well i guess this is a vent poem and yes I have written quite a few.Like the above poet I did think the gay bashing was harsh but It's a free country.I personally think sexual orientation is not fodder for poems.So in closing a nice poem with a metal type ring to it..As in heavy..


  • RiseFromThyAshes
    February 20, 2005
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    Honestly, I think this poem was okay. Not wonderful, but not bad. I liked the messaged it sent. Though I didn't like how it seemed you were dissing gays or bisexuals. Also, I think the cussing made it somewhat childish (A little, not a lot.) because it was used too much. Other than that, the poem is pretty good.
    Edited on Feb 20, 10:54 p.m. because ''.

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