Oh Mommy, dear mommy
please let me wish…
Lord, take away broccoli
and stinky old fish
and worry and hurry
and stingy eyed soap
and bring me a brother
who isn’t a dope -
who won’t give me noogies
knock over my tea
or tease at the drawing
I drew of that tree
with kittens like noodles
asleep on each limb
and leave me a brother
much brighter than him.
Please take away reasons
for me to be sad
and leave me a horsey
instead of my dad
'cuz dad’s getting older
and slower each day
and can’t give me rides
in his perfect pop way.
And can I have straight hair
instead of crude curls?
I want to be pretty
like all dolly girls
with dimples and white teeth
and hair with a shine
and please make it blond
not some dumb red like mine.
Please give me fat posies
with bees that don’t sting
and let mom remember
the words when she sings
my lullaby song
as she hums me goodnight -
But other than these, God,
you got it just right.
Amen
Author notes
subtitle: Birth of a Malcontent
I just needed to regress into simplicity for a bit.
Written February 16th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry For Children by Granny Goose.
300 points, ended March 2, 2005, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congrats for this was a well deserved win.it has all the heart of a child.i think that i will let my granddaughter read it as well and i know she will love this.i am so glad that you shared this.
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Fantastic!...I can certainly see why you won this contest!....I must read this to Christopher (my grandson)...he will absolutely adore it!....very well deserved!..congratulations...leanne xxxx
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Congratulations!!!!!! Wonderful Poem!
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great poem. it was outstanding! it was so funny and humerious!keep up the good work! have a great day and have fun!
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and don't you just see all, my dear cvillelisa. Thank you.
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Lol... what a delightful poem
And thank you for entering the contest.
I love this one. It's so innocent, childlike and so humerous
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Dear Jane,
When you write charming you win all our hearts. This is just delicious and, with loving memories of my own three daughters at that delightful age, I can vouch that you really capture a child's heart in your verse. Ten out of ten for this. Applause.
No poem in this comment!! Love and hugs, XXX Hugh. -
Will you share your fat posies with me? They sound perfect.
Let's jump rope and sing "Blue bells cockle shells"
Hmm. I have a bunch of brothers .. all dopey at times but I love em. Except when they are mean to me. Like at dinner every night .. telling me I'm going to get rickets if I don't eat my green beans.
I like your subtitle
Simplicity is best. I'm striving for it to take over my life. A struggle though ..
Hi Jane.
Nearly spring for a moment here today in the sun. Heading to warmer climes Monday - not as beautiful as yours were but nice enough to chase away the blahs.
More here then meets the first reading eye .. really.
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Outstanding invocation of the whimsy of a child, one-lucks. This was a genuinely enjoyable read. Alas, while I don't have a daughter, I definitely can relate to the stanza containing the lines: "'cuz dad’s getting older/ and slower each day."
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What an endearing prayer. So innocent,childlike, and hopeful. This brought a smile to my face.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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