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Beauty of One

Smile have the heavens upon us
   for they have created a presence
   so glorious to thee,that
   the great sunrises` of greece fall soft
   and deam in her beauty and only  
   in her smile does the nights sky light up.
   Such is the beauty of a misty rose
   as the sun first lays upon it
   can I describe her radiance.
   Her scent lingers around you
   as though natures` flower
   blossoming for the first tme.
   But left am I,feeling shallowness
   may exist within,
   but find her beauty deepens,
   as the sun that rises in its` beauty and
   sets revealing in its deamness
   an aura of inner beauty,
   leaving the night air romancing us.

   Come but more surrounds this
   beauty of one, but I shall
   leave her in her elegance
   and shall say no more.

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Written February 16th, 2005

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  • LonelyLilly
    May 26, 2008
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    If you had even bothered to read what I had asked of you, you would have read that I specifically asked that the titles that I have listed remain the same.
    So I have no idea why your title is different to the ones in my contest since the rule was pretty simple.

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    March 1, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry,good luck, Josie


  • Ladybug
    January 16, 2008
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    I enjoyed this very much
    almost sings like a melody

    thanks for your entry

    Tamara


  • Nicole Cudworth
    November 6, 2007
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    Thank you for your entry.

    Love and luck in all you endeavor.


  • God is my reality
    August 18, 2007

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    This is very cute. I really like it. It is lovely. I like it. It is very beautiful. It's so deep. I love the emotion in it. You did an excellent job, and good luck in the contest


  • LoveDroveMeCrazy4U
    August 10, 2007
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    Nice work, very lovely. I liked it a lot. Good luck!
    PQ16


  • ButterflyforChrist
    July 17, 2007

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    Beautiful, sweet, tender, caring, and full of emotion. This flows so elegantly. So deep. A beautiful piece. Thank you for entering!


  • country-girl
    June 12, 2007
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    aww, that was really sweet. a really poetric and deep poem. thank you for entering!!

  • Astrotriz
    June 6, 2007

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    Lovely poem, not quite what I was looking for, but contest aside-- it was really great.

    I just wish you'd added the things I mentioned in the description of the contest. Maybe you would've gotten a trophy.


  • cali951
    May 24, 2007
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    nice poeem good job and good luck in my contest

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    May 24, 2007
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    Thank you for your lovely entry, Josephine


  • Kromus
    February 4, 2007

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    Romanticly Wonderful

    Such a brillaint, imaginative, descriptive, and inspiring peice. Loved it!

    I liked this poem very much because u dont go off track about the beauty your describing, which a lot of people can, you stay consistent, and it flows beautyfully.

    'Such is the beauty of a misty rose
    as the sun first lays upon it'
    - Beatiful image created here, quite short too, but beautiful.

    Overall, this poem was fantastic, and love filled, well done


  • Entwining Beauty
    February 4, 2007
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    wow you have captured such a beautuful romanc in your words very beautiful thank you


  • Choco Monkey
    January 8, 2007
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    Wow
    This is really good

    Lynta


  • xox-lankan-xox
    December 17, 2006

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    Wow! Very well written! Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck! My favorite lines were " Her scent lingers around you
    as though natures` flower
    blossoming for the first tme.
    But left am I,feeling shallowness
    may exist within,
    but find her beauty deepens,
    as the sun that rises in its` beauty and
    sets revealing in its deamness
    an aura of inner beauty,
    leaving the night air romancing us." Thanks again and good luck! Your a great poet !!


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 15, 2006

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    Most wonderfully and beautifully written! Thank you for sharing and for entering my contest! Loved this!


  • caesarjager
    November 5, 2006
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    This is breathtakingly beautiful, I truly love this poem, it's so refreshing and lovely. Thanks for entering such a ppiece of art into my contest you have raised the bar with this and will make my judging a challenge, take care and good luck to you in all you do in life.

  • peabody
    June 3, 2006
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    true romance

    Your way with words, is very very exciting.

  • Lost In Isolation
    May 22, 2006
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    oo amazing work, very detailed and just a great read, i think you did a good job, and continue writing this was relaxing to read lol if that makes sense but great job once again

  • goodbye carnivale
    August 11, 2005
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    It looks like an uncomfortable length but it's really perfect as it reads. I like the wording and flow.. and the whole idea of course. Great job Good luck in the contest

    -mercé

  • XxAsianBabexX
    August 7, 2005
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    i'll give you something for your work...
    Edited on Aug 07, 12:40 because ''.

  • XxAsianBabexX
    August 7, 2005
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    you have to comment on other peoples work and if you agree to the rules then paste what is said to be pasted in your author box....if you dont do tht, i will NOT read your poem

  • rgrpaperboy
    July 24, 2005
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    Good poem and good luck in the contest, Rick


  • chanterai
    July 14, 2005
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    Beautiful!

    This was beautiful! The love shown for the girl in the poem is something so grand, so beyond words that no other could touch it, because it's yours and hers. This was an absolute joy to read! Thanks for submitting and best of luck! =)

  • violet-kissess
    July 7, 2005
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    nice. very good. good luck in the contest
    ~violet


  • RazorbladeRomance17
    June 24, 2005
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    very good but I'm sorry you did not comment on one of my poems and i'm very strict about my rules and I dont want to dq such a brilliant poem you have 9 hours


  • June 24, 2005
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    This was beautifully written. You really have talent! Good luck in the contest!


  • Mariposita
    June 14, 2005
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    yes i did like the poem. very much. this poemis so elegant, almost like a dream. very well done.

  • Salem
    June 14, 2005
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    hey snobunny, wondering if you liked the poem?

  • Mariposita
    June 14, 2005
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    Thnaks for entering!


  • PurpleSky
    February 16, 2005
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    what an elegant and beautiful poem you have here. I love how smoothly this all flows and the words you used to describe this love. awsome job and a very enjoyable read.
    love and hugs
    ~Lena~


  • Forms of Me
    February 16, 2005
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    Wow..this is such a beautiful poem..I am suprised that no one has commented on it yet.

    I love the imagery...and the feeling...you have beautifully conveyed....so real..and so vivid. I love to read writing..as this...because it captivates your attention and it keeps it.
    The flow is great as well...nothing feels forced...and it rolls smoothly through my mind as I read the words.


    keep up the great work.

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