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My friend.

In the growing dark,
The world closed in.
Pain washed over my soul.
With each new tear,
And a little more lost.
Another star gone.
What a broken heart cost.

But...

I heard a familiar voice,
My dearest friend close by.
He's my comfort like a bear,
My laughter with a song,
A friend I'd never do without,
Through the night so long.

So...

Smile when you see him,
Know he's very dear.
Treasure every kindness,
Banish every tear.
And in your darkest, longest hour,
You'll find he's very near.

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Written February 15th, 2005

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  • darkgurl662
    August 10, 2005
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    ur a very good writer i liked this one

  • taintedangel
    June 20, 2005
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    AwesomE!

    This was well written and it is safe to say we could all use a friend like that. Keep up the good work! (and also, thanx for commenting on my piece,"Why I Cut")


  • May 10, 2005
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    What a wonderful expression of gratitude for a serious friendship. Your words flow so well and your rhyme is very nicely toned. This is a great tribute to what seems to be a true friend.

    Charles

  • reejim
    May 7, 2005
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    I really loved the way this read.It expresses feelings and how they can be comforted.Thanks for the read.Jim


  • masked man
    April 6, 2005
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    excellent

    What a beautiful tribute to your friend. I too thought you were talking about God as I read, it is that emotional. An excellent write, very smooth flowing, and I liked the rhyme scheme. I don't think I've seen that one before, very nice without being too structured. Great work! ~Weldon

  • sh3s cOmpliCaTed
    March 29, 2005
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    I REALLY LIKE THIS!! It flows nicely and its just an all around great poem
    Jessica


  • DizzyLizzy
    March 29, 2005
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    He sure is one lucky guy!

    A thoroughly enjoyable read. Smooth and easy flowing. When heartaches comes, as come it will, it is so good to have a friend to lean on.

    When I read through I wa not sure if the friend was human or divine - this lovely poem would apply just as much for both.
    Diz


  • Eeyores Buddy
    March 29, 2005
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    Wow i thought this was brilliant. Such a positive message and full of emotion. Great write and well done. Keep writing!

    katy


  • February 25, 2005
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    I love this; it is so full of hope and love. Thank you for spreading the positive feeling, the light of God. This will not go unnoticed. May peace be with you, love, M


  • Mythtress
    February 25, 2005
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    Great poem. I enjoyed the message and the simplicity of it. And...I LOVE to smile. Write on, poet.

  • poexlll
    February 23, 2005
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    great

    Great this poem is very moving,I enjoyed this poem very much,I hope to read more,and i hope to find that friend you speak of,great job in your writeing..


  • kirika
    February 20, 2005
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    Very good

    Great poem, I loved it! Friendship shines through your words and make us think about it.
    And thanks for your comment on my poem "Rebirth"


  • senza
    February 18, 2005
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    Very touching piece. I lovd the 'banish every tear'.
    GReat work, keep writing!
    PS thanks for commenting on Last Goodbye!
    Lady anairO


  • oracle55
    February 15, 2005
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    Excellent writing, simple and straight forward, heart on your sleeve. Great work...

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