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Will you be mine?

My feelings for you seem so wrong
But at the same time still so strong

All along you've known it
But I just couldn't admit

Not only to you and everybody else
But also to myself

I denied my love for you
But what else could I do

You had her
And she was much prettier

So I've decided now is time
But the question is will you still be mine?

Author notes

This is about someone who liked me last year and I tried not to like them b/c I didnt wanna mess things up between us... I hope I will be able to tell them how I really feel...
Written February 14th, 2005

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  • lostmyhead
    September 24, 2005
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    Awesome poem! I love this poem! Especially this part:
    "So I've decided now is time
    But the question is will you still be mine?"

  • Akasha2379
    March 16, 2005
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    Hey hunny... i love you too sweetie pie... okay who is this about i would love to know who it is that you want to be yours.. david and brian moved into my old apartment complex.. wow.. paaarrrty.. lol.. hehe.. call me some time thump!!!


  • March 4, 2005
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    O wow great poem! Thanks so much for entering and good luck!


  • HeavenScent4U
    February 18, 2005
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    Good Poem. Reminds me kind of the situation that I am in at the moment. Only you are fortunate enough to have that person around, I'm assuming. I, am less fortunate. I am presently scouring the earth to "FIND" the lost love in my life and he seems to have vanished off the face of the earth. Too bad, so sad for me. But I am a determined woman and where there's a will, there's a way and I think I shall search for this love, the one who could have saved me from years of hurt until the day I die. I really enjoyed your poem. Be Well and Be Blessed.

  • JesusFreak09
    February 15, 2005
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    Hey Loser! This is a great write! i love it! short sweet and to the point. i wanna know who your talking about tho..LoL..love yas!
    -Kayla

  • fasterthanU
    February 14, 2005
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    hey, there's nothing wrong with persistence! i've become a master at that! lol. if there's one thing i've learned in life, it's that you can't (or at least probably won't) get what you want in life if you don't put forth your best effort. it never hurts to ask again. i hope everything works out for you in your love life, and you are happy with the results. best of wishes, and keep up the good work!! HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY!!!! (or at least what's left of it)

    ~tyler

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