Three roses sat, dying, in a roadside grave.
Each one a memory,
A first love never reached,
A scorned valentine,
A fading will, grasping for life.
Cast aside, and left to rot.
Decaying into the pale night mist.
A white rose there was,
So fair in character,
Perfect in each facet.
Fading away into myth,
Bleeding petals into
The dim autumn light.
A black rose sat beside her,
Carressing her along the graveside,
Shading her from
The tears that fell,
Killing her softly,
Amidst a shroud of darkness.
The red rose I gave you,
Lay, buried in grief,
Next to the black shepherd.
Whispering its sweet nothings,
Into her fading ear,
Fighting back the pain,
Holding on to her for dear life.
And there sat my heart,
Grasping the rose for all that was left.
Beating despite the wound
You so insolently inflicted.
And as I sat there, my hand
Still clutching what hope I had left,
Cupid drifted down to me,
Trying to drive away the pain.
Yet in all his grace,
What I thought
Was the beating of my heart,
Were tears hitting the ground,
While the Angels cried.
Author notes
I guess that too many people think of love in a general way, And I thought I'd try to approach this whole concept from a different angle. I wrote this on Valentine's day ironically...
Written February 14th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Imagery, Metaphor, Message and Any subject!!!!!! by Heavens Child.
525 points, ended April 9, 2007, 21 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your best #2 by love my jose luis.
600 points, ended April 28, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your best work. by BurnBrandMemory.
443 points, ended April 30, 2007, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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i liked this. a lot
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Thank you for choosing my poem as second in your contest. I wrote this poem a couple of years ago, but its words still ring true today. I hope it touched you somehow, as that was only my ever goal.
~The Sleepless One -
I'm one of the ones who can't stand all the mushy stuff.....but I find I really love them if they have stunning imagery and are well written....so I've been expanding my vision to them. As for this poem, I think it is simply amazing. The imagery, the use of colour combined with such deep emotion is fabulous. An outstanding display of talent. Thank you for this entry in my contest.
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wow. that was amazing. so beautiful. great write, i enjoyed reading it.
~dust~ -
Thank you for entering the Summer Survivor Series Poetry Island competition. We are in the process of reading all poems and making our list .. we anticipate posting the Round 1 Results early next week. Watch the Round 1 Column ..
Thanks and keep writing.
Cvillelisa, Desiree Darkk, Son of the Moon -
This was had a lot of depth. I really loved the personification of the roses. I loved your use of color and imagery. The flow was a little loose, but it wroked for this. Great job, thanks for the entry. Good Luck!!!
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AWESOME
WoW this is an awesome piece just what I wanted it has attributed alot of characteristics that make this poem very unique and touching with a bit of bitterness, good luck in the contest.-Jeremy -
This is superb I can see the pain of your loss throughout this poem. This is such a sensitive poem written perfectly to describe the pain you were feeling. I can see why this won you gold as you rightly say it is written from your heart and that really does show. This was so sad.
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this is by far one of the best poems i've read. iloved each passing stanza and was captivated by your words. this is really a masterful poem
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aw, this was really good, the first sad one, that was entered in my contest, this was breath taking i like it alot and i think you did a great job describing everything, i read it a second time and liked it even more you certainly did the job that was asked, and i think you did a great job! keep it up!
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Thank you very much kermit.
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OMG. i love it! it almost brought me to tears, and when i cry, its GOTTA be good. hehe. awesome write.
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humbling
O wow. 3 three roses. you wanted to know y i liked your work well here it be. You weaved this wonderfully and my first gold was from a poem called candles and roses. Weird. But you def deserved the gold for this. Love is a vast subject that can be seen in many view points but how your heart sees love and your heart sees love beautifully. I wish you all the love and happiness in creation and happy late v-day.
Dawn ~Moon~ -
I try to write most of my material from personal viewpoints. Sad to say, I'm somewhat of a hopeless romantic. I have tons of love poems that I haven't posted on this site because, lets be honest, people can only take so much of the mushy stuff.
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It is amazing! Truly, it does come from the heart (though to be honest some poetry from the heart-sucks, thankfully, yours is awesome! Don't mean to be rude or ignorant but that's just me...)
Great poem. I love seeing commercial things-like Love and Valentines come from a different angle and viewpoint. You did awesome!
~Jen Thanx for entering -
Great stuff
This certainly goes through all emotions, changing with the different colour roses. Very powerful imagery and written beautifully! I recently entered a poem on Roses, which I think this poem would have met the criteria really well and ould have had an excellent chance of winning! Great stuff, all the best Paul -
Wow, what a beautifully written poem, you really have a way with words. Keep up the great work
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This was captivating, and purely amazing. I'm speachless at the moment.
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I am the oddball, I usually find poems of roses beautiful, but this poems seems to change tenses. ie: a white rose was there, A black rose sat beside her, The red rose I gave you, see how the tenses change?
With edit and correction, I feel this poem could be an excellent piece of work.
Rose -
Wow... Very unique. I enjoyed this. It's definetely something you don't see very often. Very deep. God Bless.
-Tawney -
Your cheering section has covered all the bases. I can't think of anything original to say. Good luck with your writing.
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Oh, that was so beautiful. It truly was. I was hooked from the first line, which was my favourite line, and I felt truly moved by your words.
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Wow this was amazing, pure imagery and pain...in the midst of love.
This is so powerful... and full of emotion.
Grea write
Good luck in this here contest eh?
Lotsa Love,
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wow
wow you've got me beat by a longshot
your such a great writer!
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WOW, this was amazing, I like how you had three different colour roses each one sybolising something different, thankyou for entering my competition, great write, keep it up, love Romanee, xx
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once again you've got some kick ass imagery in this poem. well-in all your poems actually which is why i love them, it gives me something that keeps my interest and i feel like i can almost reach out and touch the words. weird i know but yeah, wonderful right.
Arachne -
best of the best
the imagery, your choice of words, it brings the whole poem together. i like the personification you used for the roses n your heart. really cool. keep writing!! -
An incredibly beautiful poem. This painted a lot of sad images for me and brought back some recent events.
It's very ironic that you wrote this on valentines day, that was the day I lost a dear friend.
A white rose there was,
So fair in character,
Perfect in each facet.
Fading away into myth,
Bleeding petals into
The dim autumn light.
This describes her well, fair in character and perfect, but simply faded away into myth.
Yet in all his grace,
What I thought
Was the beating of my heart,
Were tears hitting the ground,
While the Angels cried.
I can relate to this one well, I've sat here many nights listening to the sound of my tears hitting the keyboard. Trying to grasp things and make sense of things. Maybe one day it will be clear.
I think this is a strong contender for the contest in which you have entered it in, Good luck with it. I hope you do well
Sapphire
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Fairly brilliant, my good sir.
I was under the impression that I was in for you being a bastard and having your "love" split between three women, but this was definitely better than something like that. I applaud you. -
awesome! :P
it was very good. i really liked it. it was a little confusing at times, but that might just be my confused nature..
o well, still... good job
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omg! this was soooo beautifully written..it actually made me cry..i loved it, i mean i really loved it...keep it up
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this poem was so beautiful and i loved it. the emotion put into this and the imagery that it gives the reader. it truley was a very beautiful piece and i am thankful to have come across it to read. keep writing
Babie -
ahgh...this is absolutely heart wrenching...I read this and I felt almost convicted...I love how you personified the roses...Your choice of diction and your imagery really do make this piece strong...I do not know how you could approve upon it...
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Wow beautiful!! Omg I loooved the last stanza:
"Yet in all his grace,
What I thought
Was the beating of my heart,
Were tears hitting the ground,
While the Angels cried."
*Gasp* just beautiful! The whole thing was! I really am a sucker for any rose poem and have written a few myself but this is so much better than mine. Nice job!
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You did approach it from a different angle. One that I have not seen before, and thats why I like this poem. Itwas a really good write. It kept me reading. I was sucked into the poem. Keep up the awesome job.
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very very gripping poem- keep up the good work
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Wow wow wow. The imagery really took my breath away. This new angle was refreshingly done and beautiful. This was really a GREAT poem. Fantastic job.
Reesa
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Wow. Wow. That left me breathless. It was so amazing. The imagery was wonderful and it was almost as if I could see a cross on the side of the rose with three single roses and a faintly beating heart. Wow. Beautiful poem. Write on. ~~SpydurPoet~~
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Good Piece
Three roses sat, dying, in a roadside grave.
Each one a memory,
A first love never reached,
A scorned valentine,
A fading will, grasping for life.
Cast aside, and left to rot.
Decaying into the pale night mist.
This stanza painted such a lovely image, I had no idea what to do with myself. I swooned, darling, like a swallow bringing about he summer. Would you ahve caredt o see me?
excelent piece, and keep up the good work!! -
you have done great work here! brovo, you have touched me.
the deth of the rosed and the sideroad grave is awsome1
side comment please read mine -
Thanks for all the comments guys, your opinion is really appreciated.
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great!
this was amazing! i loved the part:
"A black rose sat beside her,
Carressing her along the graveside,
Shading her from
The tears that fell,
Killing her softly,
Amidst a shroud of darkness."
it was sad but lovely. please keep up the great work i hope to read more soon!
later days
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great immagery i really liked this peice it is very emotional and measningfull. a job well done keep up the poetry theyre perfect!!
Sarah
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wonderbread
wow...this was beatiful. simply so. magnificent piece of imagry and word choice! I SALUTE YOU! thanks for shring!
-Lunatic
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Bravo...you took me on a ride of emotion..the death of each rose signifies so very much...your use of metaphors in this poem is sweet...and very familiar
Death of a Rose (original lost version)
A freshly cut rose, the symbol of Love-
Arrives with anticipation of fullfillment and joy.
The scent of death is sweet, as a spring rain-
That brings the rose from its long dream of suffocation.
Now it suffers on, still clinging to its vanity.
Much like a funeral procession-
She appears so beautiful, so natural.
But not one to hear its cries-
Only the breath of babes to hold-
In their demise.
As it opens its eyes for all to see-
Its body stripped as though-
Its thorns could pierce the vase.
Still not one to hear its cries-
Only to bask in its beauty of death.
we may have been looking at the symbol of love in much of the same terms...great poem...Peace Muddy
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really good work it's really cool thanx for trying to wake up all the people inside it's a true msg for everyone
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Thank you very much for commenting Patty. I'm glad you took the time to read it.
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Wonderfully written. I enjoyed every word, devoured it. The only mistake I found was in the third stanza, third/fourth lines, you have "the" twice.
This is such a lovely poem, well written, and well defined. The imagery is pure perfection. Thanks for asking me to look at this. I will pass it on to some others. Hugs, Patricia &:hearts; -
Dieing? Tsk tsk. Sock demands that you change that to "dying" or she shall eat your left ear 
Very beautiful, and dark. We all know how much Sock loves dark poetry. Even if it is in the category of romance. Dark romance is wonderful. Might just be your best so far
Good luck in the contest.
- Sock -
I was telling a few people, I think this is the best piece of poetry I've ever written. Thank you for your comment.
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Thanks for the comment Columbine, as I said to Patty, your opinion is greatly appreciated.
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Awesome!
Oh,my goooosh!This is sooooooo greeeaaaat!It is marvelous!You have created such a beautifully artistic peice of poetry here!Awesome! -
My god I am speachless... this poem was amazing! Sad too though... you write beautifully! I'm in awe...
Peta Pan -
Thank you very much. Your opinion is valued greatly.
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I will have to read this and comment later. I have an appointment for a sleep test, so it will be tomorrow morning, but I promise to do it then. Hugs, Patricia ♥
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