Screams of pain and agony
shrieks of terror and fear
setting you ablaze
sering off your skin
the smell of your sins fills the air
cleansing your body
making you pure
you will no longer suffer
in this world of pain
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Written February 14th, 2005
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omg this wuz like amazing u r my new idol in potry
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this is a really great poem!i love this! i like how the pain turned into happiness!i wish that would happen to me...but my bf dumped me and i feel like im worthless now....but anywaz great poem!
~rachelle
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Interesting perspective, and i like it. Very unique and creative. It has a beautiful message, and it is well written.
Good work!
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Whoa, it actually is probably ment to be dark but it almost was, in a weird way, uplifting. They don't have to go through the pain anymore... they paid for their sins and now are released. I don't want to try to interpret your work because that isn't why we do this but it speaks to everyone differently. Great write.
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Thats awesome, i love how you word everything, short and to the point
, ttyl!
~Jess -
Wow... Great Write... This is beautiful... You have an awesome mind
Very Poetic... Also sounds like a song 
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It sounds as your trying to spare them the world but yet punish them for their sins. Intrusive but in a not so broken up manner.
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