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Unkissable

These lips taste sweetly
but, you cannot have them.
They are not yours.

These sensuous lips
are painted red with desire.
Smoothly they part,
and words slide off them
to dance with every breath escaping.

These passionate lips
fill a delicate smile.
Brushing up against a cheek
or an ear;
resuscitating your every wish.

These lips taste sweetly
but, you cannot have them.
They're not yours,
they're not even mine.

Author notes

Hey everybody, I didn't intend for this to be a Valentines Day poem but I figured it was more then appropriate for the occasion. Hope you enjoyed and comments are more then welcomed.
Sinceritamente,
Venomous Scorpio
Written February 14th, 2005

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  • Vincent-Shadow
    August 1, 2006
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    I think you have left us all wondering whos lips do you speak of yet as we wonder we might learn things or relize odd intresting points of meraning and ya cool poem i liked it odd you i was goin through my favs and you of all ppl caught my eye lol hopw you still doing well

    Vincent


  • AngelDeAmor
    April 3, 2006
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    Then whose are they? Damien' s? Hehe.



    Soft lips... destined to trace
    contours of sternness
    and hollow cause



    Nice write.

    ~Pedro~


  • Morbid Poetic
    March 16, 2005
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    what a twist

    The end is the main point of the poem...
    you go through the entire peice talking about these lips... infatuating over them... explaining them as if they are forbidden... and then bruise the audience with the fact that they belong to somone entirley different from yourself...
    What a Twist... your poems are really starting to inspire me
    please continue to write


  • lightwithinyourdark
    February 15, 2005
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    i really liked this poem, it had a lot of expression behind it. i liked the repetitive lines that reacurr, they make it much more enjoyable to read. anywho, really great write, so keep writing, and have a nice dya!!!!!!!

  • animepoetess
    February 15, 2005
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    Beautifully written,filled with unreachable passion,awesome imagery...what else can I say...it is wonderfully written.

    --Animaechick


  • justin d-
    February 15, 2005
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    But the lips are so sweet.. can i have them? Just Kidding... Nice poem i like the theme


  • fly
    February 14, 2005
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    Wow

    What great use of imagry. It pulls you right in. I could feel the softness and yearned for those delicate lips with passion, just out of reach... Sory... just getting in the mood for valentines day. Great write. Fly


  • daniellelynn
    February 14, 2005
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    i love it. if they are not yours then whos are they? were you even talkin about the lips on your face? im so confused but here lately that doesnt take much
    Edited on Feb 14, 3:32 p.m. because ''.


  • QT-jerZ-STARLET
    February 14, 2005
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    Incredible Love Poem

    Beautiful write, absolutely sets the mood for Valentine's day.
    Your literary composition so imaginative and compelling....I couldnt stop reading from start to finish...keep it up...BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Unbridled1
    February 14, 2005
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    Well, yeah...this is very different for the love category...lol

    i liked it though...only thing that kind of threw me was
    the last line..."they're not even mine." Then whose are
    they? lol

    whether it is us or someone else...there are always those
    who remain just out of reach.


    UB

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