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Eternal

Today is a day I will grow,
Through tears,
Smiles.
Tomorrow I may fly,
Away.
It's hard to let go,
Like rain
Burdens
Fall.
In whispering quiet,
Peace.
In the long weary day,
Energy...
Gives strength.
Because of His love,
Eternity,
Was born today.

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Written February 14th, 2005

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  • darkgurl662
    August 10, 2005
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    very nice


  • pink-roses gold member
    June 28, 2005
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    The sort lines break up the poem, which reduces the flow. However, I think that adds to the poem, as it highlights the occational longer line, and creates a feeling energy in the poem. I love the title. This is just wonderful, and obviously well thought through.
    pinkxxx

  • noir eclairage
    June 22, 2005
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    This is a beautiful poem, i really like it! I try to grow through my tears too, but it doesnt always work. Great write. I promise to check out mroe of your work later, but for now I have got to go.
    ~noir ~


  • LadyLookingGlass
    June 15, 2005
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    Oh I love this!!! Such a happy love poem...kudos.


  • thekillerinside
    March 29, 2005
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    I note that this was penned on valentine's day.. or at least it was posted on that day Beautiful words for your partner..

  • ChallenginFenix
    February 19, 2005
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    lovely

    This is beautiful! Plus, I love short poems, the long ones just tend to lose steam as they go. Very well done. And thank you for commenting on my poem, I really appreciate your time.
    ~Amerita

  • trumpet girl
    February 14, 2005
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    Love and pain are the only way to live a ful life. To quote 'A Knight's Tale,' "you must learn to take the bad with the good." This poem really portrays this to the reader.Very lovely.


  • kirika
    February 14, 2005
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    very good

    i think it was gentle and beautiful. like it!


  • Alahmorah
    February 14, 2005
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    Well written. It did flow well, and it also held my attention well. Great job. Love and Blessings, Ashlee
    Happy Valentines Day!!

  • Curve Ball
    February 14, 2005
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    Short and sweet. This is a very nice poem. Your a great writter, keepm writing and keep up the good work!!!!!


  • The Eros
    February 14, 2005
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    excellent

    a nice poem and i must add the word hopeful, it really is and the flow was quite good especially that rhym that it made few lines later from the start, the poem tells the way of life in its own metaphoric way tell the readers to keep going, and a way of life it is that trough tears bloom smiles through pain comes happiness , a well written poem !

  • brokendown
    February 14, 2005
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    very nice, flows easy. keep up the work!!!!

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