Somehow I need to know you still care
My throat has already begun to snare
It's really closing in on me
I fear what we are now to be
The wounds on my arms will soon be scars
Once I have broken down the bars
When I no longer feel for you
The love that now seems all too true
I don't hate you
For not loving me too
But I wish I could
Because you should
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On my feelings and the current situation of my first true love and I......
Written February 14th, 2005
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Wonderful write and a very strong finish. I thought this was loaded with emotion and you used rhyming so well. I am delighted at the depth of emotion displayed actually. You did very well here.
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awesome write, something I'm sure many others can relate to, because I know I can...
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A very nice penn full of deep feelings that come from within. from within is where all good writings come from so keep penning from the heart
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very nice..reminds me of many i have known in life,
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I love your style here. But I think what hit me most with this poem was the ending. It was finsihed just right in my opinion. I can really relate to this. Good job, I'll read more soon. hugs Phil xxx
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mmmm... sad. an over-used word, but still... sad. good rhyming.
I don't hate you
For not loving me too
But I wish I could
Because you should
i can relate... very beautifully written, my friend. keep it up
-m-
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"The wounds on my arms will soon be scars
Once I have broken down the bars
When I no longer feel for you
The love that now seems all too true"
i hate valentines, brings out all the bad feelings of love, being alone sucks, and i am
, well, o well, this is a brilliant poem, well done, be safe
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