I hate you right now
you just don't even know!
I wish you would leave
why won't you go!
I have to many problems
that don't deal with you!
But the one that erks me most
is trying to be near you!
I hate you right now
you acted like a kid!
Yo really pissed me off
right now I freakin' hate you syd!
Why the hell do you have to rub it in my face
he is not even worth it!
I wish someone would put you in your place!
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Written February 13th, 2005
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THis is ok I guess. It seems to need some work thats for sure. keep it up though, you have talent. And my kind of style! I like this style writing. Please do write more!
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I dont think this is anyway near as good as your other poem...but with a bit of work this could be good. I can tell it's very personal to you but i dont think what happened to you (correct me if I'm wrong) is really portrayed very well. The structure is a bit...off balance but your rhyming is good!
Saz
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