Under the light of Luna’s orb
the child waits.
In his hands a daisy white and pure,
its petals dipped in red,
his innocence made filthy,
stained by his sorrow.
Beneath the endless sky,
the child waits,
his skin pale with his hidden secrets.
I watch as he tears the petals,
dropping each at his feet.
Now only a rose remains,
its bloom crimson like life’s essence.
I watch as his tears fall,
his youth waning before me.
He holds out his hand,
longing to be heard,
but his pain is too great.
Sweet dear child,
I wish I knew how you felt,
I wish I heard you cry.
Your cries became silent,
falling speechlessly on deaf ears,
your tears faded,
showing before my blind eyes.
Why,
when time has fled from me,
have I now only learned of your pain.
Oh, beloved child,
your innocence has been taken too young.
I reached for your hand,
but the distance was too far,
though I was next to you.
Sleep softly now child,
your pain has been lifted.
Rest quietly,
for your cares have faded away.
Know, my darling one,
forever in our hearts you will be,
your face and voice never leaving us.
I wish only that I had been able to tell you how much you meant,
You were everything.
Author notes
..::this is to a dear friend that commited suicide RIP -- Stacey M Lewis Jr 1988 - 2005 WE LOVE YOU STACEY!!::..
'Life is but a walking shadow'
Enjoy!
Written February 13th, 2005
(( Theme : Suicide ))
~ OPTION NUMBER 18;21 for "36 Options Contest"~
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Very well written for this contest, an excellently done and flowing poem. Well done here good job...Scott
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thank you for your kind words.
glad to know you enjoyed the piece!!
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I can too closely relate to this, I like the poem a lot.
I had a Brother that committed suicide, I still wonder why?
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Guilty ( Everybody"s Guilty)
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This is a very good poem. A poem about suicide but so meaningful and emotional at the same time. Something I can read and really feel something. Thank you for entering!
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While I really enjoyed reading this, Im afraid I really cannot accept this as an etry for the contest, because of the length. I hope you understand. Thank you and all the best
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This is a very poignant poem about your friend's suicide.
In this phrase I would take out "made filthy" and the second "his". I think it has much stronger impact as well as the added bonus of nice alliteration without it.
"his innocence
stained by sorrow."
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Great
This was very great and imaginative, it trailed off a bit during the middle, but other wise very good. Thank you for entering and following my rules.
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beautiful!
beautiful and touching dedication...What a tragedy....Your emotions spills in every line...So very sad
TY for entering my contest
Lynda
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Wow!!!
This is very sad. I really love it. keep up the good writing and good luck in the contest.
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Thanks for your comments. Glad you liked it. Thank you for hosting! bye bye
<3 Triste -
thank you for your contest entry
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i like how it seems that the child is dying and there is someone there trying to save him but ends coming up short everytime
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wow. this is beautiful. this is a very different type of suicide poem, very smoothe, and calm, yet touching and sad. your word choice is amazing. Im sorry you had to go through this, losing someone is hard, especially by their own hand. But everyone has their time, i guess, and you have to accept that. you amazingly put your emotions into words with this piece, i love it. thanks for entering this.
Good luck
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Beautiful and sad but yet so powerful
This is a great poem. i havnt lost a friend due to suicide but i do hav friends who hav lost one because of it. It makes me think about what my friends would say if i were to do that kind of thing. but idk what some would say or do. but i do think that a few might follow with me...i sure hope not. but i'm not at all sure. -
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Wow very moving.
Despite the noise over my side of the computer I really was 'into it' if u know what i mean<.
Really soft and sweet
Youd make a good parent!
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This is such a touching, yet utterly despondent, poem. It is always horrid to hear of a suicide, especially of one so young. But, that is the consequence we pay for being negligent to the needs of our little ones...even if they are teenagers, they still need to be shown love, attention, and caring. It's too little, too late to give elaborate elegies and tell someone how much they were loved at a funeral--no amount of tears can bring them back. Why wasn't it shown before or during the abuse that eventually took his life?
Sometimes even I don't know if I can stand reading stuff about abuse...but this was well written.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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