I figured it out
when you told me i should
listen to her heart
"she has weird sounds"
you said.
And i thought:
"But i'm the one with the
stethscope"
Author notes
Humorous, perhaps. This poem goes with my other piece, Dear Jade - it's one of the things that tipped me off about the relationship discussed in that column - I'm a nursing student you see, and when the girl I liked told me I should listen to her girlfriend's heart b/c it sounded weird...well, wouldnt' you wonder? Who goes around listening to people's hearts without a stethoscope? Looking back, I think it's kinda funny.
Written February 13th, 2005
A contest entry
- Gay Pride by Saknika.
300 points, ended April 14, 2005, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is a very deep piece even if it doesn't have many words. Qualifys as a "short but sweet" piece in my book. Great job with this, I am very proud of you. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
~Saknika -
I LOVE this!! It seems by your author's comment that the meaning I got from your poem was an unintentional double. This reminded me very much of a person realizing for the first time that he is gay. I read it as if the voice in the poem was an unsuspecting youth who was being directed to his real self by an older, more experienced matchmaker. The phrase "weird sounds" I took to be a metaphor for not being straight. Many times gays are the last to know who they are, so I understood the stethoscope to be a metaphor also, as if to say "but how did YOU know before ME?". This is a great write viewed from either angle. Good luck in the contest!!
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nice poem
its a very inquisitve poem. i like how u get your point across in only 4 lines. really cool. -
I like this poem very much. I think of it as in a way that you are looking into her heart and you love her...but he says that it sounds wierd. So like he is saying that it is weird but you are two are the ones in love...I don't know how to explain it but I like it.
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