Intoxicating
Candle light, a fire place
sweet smile and warm embrace,
white wine in each glass-
as thoughts to dine soon will pass.
Take a chance and ask, to dance-
softly swaying as musics playing.
Intoxicating
Slowly - a hand slides to my hip
I hold my breath and bite my lip;
The curve of your neck
i tenderly kiss ,
a single night i dare not miss.
Intoxicating
Eyes of desire and burning flame
heated passion we try to tame;
as i whisper in your ear,
heartbeats quicken and show our fear.
Now our tongues sweetly tease,
feeling desire we must please.
Intoxicating
Inhibitions completely undone,
two bodies soon become one.
Lips and hands gently explore,
desires grow - enticing us more.
Intoxicating
Fire ignites - Rhythmic motion,
as the moon with the pounding ocean.
Spirits reaching - Ecstasy in waves,
We now are passion slaves.
Intoxicating
As volcanoes erupt -
slowly, we meld,
in our hands, Heaven we've held.
Spent - we fade,
sleep takes over -
Dreaming all night of this
beautiful lover.
Satisfaction Elated -
Totally Intoxicated.
Author notes
personally, i think it's better when
something is left to the imagination. so-
close your eyes and fantasize. hmmm
just wish i could see a face in this dream ?
Written February 10th, 2005
A contest entry
- Make Lust To Me by AshtrayBaby.
300 points, ended March 14, 2006, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~~Calling All Romantics~~ by Sweetangelgrace.
475 points, ended January 29, 2007, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Drown me with romance! by The Vulture.
540 points, ended February 1, 2007, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sexy*Sexy Writes by Poetic Butterfly.
600 points, ended May 12, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dirty Pretty :] by XfaceXdownX.
300 points, ended May 14, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Great buildup, steady yet seamless flow. An excellent write, and by the time it was finished, I was "Intoxicated" by your poetry, though at that same breath, I could also say it left a bit more to be desired.
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Hmmm,
` UHh, Thank you, I think?
LOL* Your comment was very nice-
yet a bit confusing....
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nice entry. good luck in the contest.
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gr8 write kept me going and aching 4 more
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* Thank you*
So glad you enjoyed it....
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Hott write...like the flow and rhyme.....love this " Inhibitions completely undone, two bodies soon become one."
Sexy
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**Thank you very much**
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Yes...I am of the same mind and thinking! Wonderfully sensual write. I did envision this and my own thoughts took control where yours left off. Beautiful write! Thanks for sharing this with me.
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preoww...which means good
yeah, I can tell you enjoyed writing this. and to comment on the 2nd line of in your 5th stanza... rock on with double meanings hahaha
and the imagination can be a nasty thing...DON'T give it any ideas. haha 
jk...keep writin Jojo!
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yummy
definitely a delicious poem indeed =) the vivid imagery is defnitely seductive. Great job in describing the moment.
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Magnificent. Bravo!!!
So sweet and romantic
I like your poem very much. Thank you for sharing...
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This is just sensually beautiful in every descriptive way, thankyou for asking me to read it, Bella
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Poetic Aphrodite
Thank you, i'm glad you like it,
I Really enjoyed writing this!
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ohhh, myy , goodness this is just.. so completely amazing , i, am like speechless , i cant even find words. great job!
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BeautifulXchoas
Thank you for the comment,
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Thanks for the tip, I Hope it looks better now?
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Wow. I can completely imagine the character in this write swinging their hips to the music and then dancing sex. Uh. Yeah. Dancing sex. Anyways, this was gorgeous! The flow was amazing for this write. The lust in this consumes the reader's soul and mind with the way it's written. Trust me. I know. A beautiful write and good luck in the contest!
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a good piece of poetry, though i look at the words 'candle light' and think it would be better as one word here. 'candlelight'
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ty- d.k.- nice wording - very well put. lol
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HAHA!,... I could feel the creciendo! "INTOXICATION" OMG,... it was like,... woah,....yeah. Tgis poem is a flippen poem!haha./// I could feel the tension in this material. Supperm Jo! Juss,... Suuuuppperm. hehe
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OOoohhh.. I like the sweet, sext, slow, subtlness here. This has a very serene and tranquil feel to it. You have done a lovely job here!
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Wonderful
I love this poem it is so good Great work on this peice you have true talent and need to keep it up. Good work I enjoy reading your poems you need to wirte more but any way great job. keep it up -
Thank you to all who enjoyed this poem.
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There is an intoxicating feeling to this write...The flow and placement creates images and the gentle erotic nature is nice...Erotic poems don't always have to be "in your face" to be great...Some of the best ones are the ones that leave the most to the imagination as you have done here...You have done very well with this.
Tory Lin
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed this.
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Nice gently erotic poem for not bending to typical poetic format (which don't get me wrong... is great! I don't either!) I like the gentle rhythm and the soft flow that leads alot to the imagination... Kinda like my favourite daydreams...
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Thank you, glad you liked it!
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Woah!! Freakin good. This was wonderful. Wonderfully wonderful. The flow, the word choice, the rythmn... ah yes.. the beauty of gentle erotica. Gorgeous. Rock out and rock on.
Manders
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