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Waiting within glass

I lay here sleeping

Pale as the moon
Rose lips

Waiting
For true love's first kiss

In a gilded coffin
Refracted images peering at me

I go to take a breath
Only to be blocked by that sinful fruit
Rotting in my throat

Closing my eyes
I go back
To the oblivion of sleep.

Author notes

The images are mixed up to show the dream-like state she's in
Written February 9th, 2005

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  • la rose espoir
    August 28, 2005
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    I very much enjoyed this. "Pale as the moon" and "rose lips" especially caught my attention. I also loved "refracted images peering at me". This piece had a unique gracefulness to it. Keep up the great writing!


  • Lucidique Angel
    February 28, 2005
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    Wow..This is..wow. Very Deep, very mind tingling, well written and portrays many things. Wonderful write. I applaud thee.