smiling at you
softly
looking up through long lashes
letting my eyes
shyly
graze your body
mesmerized
by
your
beauty
slowly, sweetly
tracing spirals
on your dainty wrist
I feel your pulse quicken
to match
mine
I try to catch
the breath
you took from me
no worries, darling
I would gladly
share
any part of me
anytime you need
feel that energy?
magnetic force that draws me near
now feel my fingertips
lightly trace your silky lips
a small hint at what's to come
this is my breath
mingling with yours
as I take one last glance
at your glassy eyes, staring into mine
wondering
if I will make that move
these are my lips
against yours
in a sensual kiss
moment of bliss
and here's my heart for you
Author notes
feeling seduced? just a little?
Written February 9th, 2005
A contest entry
- Seduced Valentine by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended February 11, 2005, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Fall in Love... by trista.
450 points, ended October 20, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Everything Erotica! by Lost-Rose-Petal.
360 points, ended November 22, 2007, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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BEAUTIFUL
Hello sweet poet,
Thanks for the link to your poem. I have finished reading it and it was very enjoyable.
You paint a vivid picture ,you allow the reader to feel and see your passion.
A very sensual and mesmerizing poem simply lovely and delicious to read ,and leaves one desiring more.
Much love and happiness to you.
Angel-anne.
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Well...I have to admit I'm really, really glad you asked me to allow prewrites.
It would have been my loss to not have this in the contest. I'm not even sure I'd classify this as erotic, but definitely seductive and done with class. Verrrry lucky the woman this was written for! 
Generally I like to see a lot more punctuation in the poems I read, but in this (quite rare) case I think it enhanced the flow. You've used the format and line spacing well to compensate, and it just...worked!
Thanks for a great entry, and for not making me regret the decision to open the contest to prewrites.
Good luck and best wishes,
~J.
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I'm glad you are pleased And I know what you mean, I usually am a stickler for punctuation and I hate reading poems that lack it, but as you noticed I used line breaking, spacing, and italics to control the pace of the piece. Thank you very much for allowing prewrites and for reading!
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Ended...perfectly, and the wrist...so few lovers know that gentle spot . I have been seduced
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Yummy, yummy, yummy! Great job and I am alil! lol.
Great job and have I told you it was yummy? -
Haha, I'm glad you liked it ^_^ And what are you doing reading naughty poetry at work? Hehe. <3
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Chase...
This was great...Really well written seduction...I am glad I read this...Thanks for sharing it with us...I need my man now...Thanks Hun and I am at work...
Tessa
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lol, thanks ;] I didn't know if it was erotic enough. Haha.
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hmmm I like this too , not sure which I like best though but this is good , Storm
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Wow! I feel heat on my inner thigh and a tingle at my breasts, intrigue me your mission has been accomplished! Well done, such a familiar feeling!
Keep Feelin' Fascination,
~Tiffany~
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