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Friend

unbelievably happy now
you picked me up and showed me how
you help me touch the sky
help me be myself and not be shy
with you i can shine
I can see you shine to
and although she stand behind
you still shine threw



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Written February 9th, 2005

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  • Jules1
    April 15, 2005
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    great!

    hiya allypops wow i love dis poem. its simple yet short and very sweet. well done. my fav lines are...
    and although she stand behind
    you still shine threw
    simply because its as if your saying that although this person has had a past he/she has managed to pick themselves up and get on with life and try their best to be happy with who they are not matter what they have been through. well thats how i interprete it. lol. ill see ya soon. have fun. love jules. xxx


  • Sunshine Always
    March 19, 2005
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    Lovely, all it takes is someone special to lift life up. An excellent write with good rhythm and flow.. Thanks for sharing. ...mal

  • Love-is-Eternal
    March 14, 2005
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    sorry i haven't commented in a while. i really like this poem. i'm glad you've found someone who you can feel this way about. i'm still looking. great poem though...really.