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Almost

Growing, ever flowing
Feeling, ever seeing
Seeing, ever being
I wonder will I ever get my meaning

Searching for the truth
Will I ever find it?
The secret of stolen youth?
Oh never mind it

Tell me how high
Will my moods go?
They never see the sky
And my eyes also

One more thing before I retreat
Into this black hole of defeat
This whole thing is just an act
Cos you see, inside, I've cracked

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Part five in a progression of six written between 2:52am and 3:59am on 26th February 2001.

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  • Master Anarchy
    November 29, 2006

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    Is there any buddy out dare?

    Is it "this" whole thing, or "the" whole thing that is just an act? As it stands it seems there be an internal contradiction of the sort that is unbecoming of poetic export (as distinct from 'import').
    Apart from that,
    you get the clap.
    (Now you really may
    wish to hide in the hole!
    () () )
    Tuck It In Eazy,
    MA.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    May 16, 2006
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    This is a wonderful write. Such intriguing thoughts and questions you ask here. No matter how high you go or how much you've seen you can never find the answer. Keep up the great work! Thank you for sharing it!

    Allen0826


  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    May 16, 2006
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    OH! I didn't even notice there was no "I" in there! There was supposed to be! Thanx for pointing that out!


  • feathered-spiders
    May 16, 2006
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    Thta's a really great piece considering the short period of time you gave yourself to write SIX! Wow. 'The secret of stolen youth?
    Oh never mind it ' those where my favourite lines because they are so natural and so truthful, like you're not even trying to hide yourself away behind colourful words and images.
    'One more thing before retreat ' I think I'd put an 'I' between 'before' and 'retreat' just so it flows a little better, but it works without as well, so it doesn't really matter I guess. Well done, you crazy person. Six poems in seven minutes...insanity
    Avian xx

  • SurrenderMyHeart
    May 16, 2006
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    wow this is really great, and i really think these would be good lyrics for a song. thanks for sharing

  • silversong
    May 16, 2006
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    I like your thoughts here . . . they mirror mine sometimes Nice write.


  • deborahseyes
    May 16, 2006
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    Loved your piece

    Searching for the truth...will I ever find it? Enjoyed your words immensly... kirk


  • December 18, 2004
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    This is wonderful Duckie. 6 in the small amount of time... sounds like something I would do... and have done. Wonderful poem

    Petal

  • SilverWolf13
    January 7, 2003
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    excellent

    this is such a strong write. i can see all the dark thoughts tumbling through your mind. i love the last phrase you used 'inside, i've cracked' yet you cannot tell this from the outside...great job

    ~SW~


  • ShaShay
    October 26, 2001
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    A nice write. I'm looking for more of your work.

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