Lush green meadows
afore my eyes
outside my cabin door
on my mountain high
Spring will be here soon
the birds will come to sing
the laughter from your heart and soul
to me mean everything
We’ll run thru the stream
that once was frozen by the cold
my heart melts with love
knowing you were sent to me from above
Yesterdays of old
you were mine and I was yours
today we stand side by side
knowing we will be together forevermore
~Lady Raven~
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Je t'adore
Written February 8th, 2005
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Very nice! ^_^ The poem flows smoothly, the imagery is great, well played out...
"We’ll run thru the stream
that once was frozen by the cold
thy heart melts with love
knowing you were sent to me from above"
This stanza kind of threw me off too. "Thru" should probably be spelled "through" instead, just because it fits with the poem a but more. And replacing "thy" with just "my" would help a lot, because suddenly switching to that when you hadn't used those pronouns before makes it all...weird...
Anywho, great job! It's a really really nice piece, so thanks for sharing it with us! ^_^ -
you're killin me here with your words. Wow, that was so romantic.
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Very beautiful and the picture gives it a heavenly heart warming feeling your words are poetry in motion taking the reader into a heavenly decent of angelic bliss combining the heart and soul as one.
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LMAO, I never realized that AND it took me a few minutes to get what you were saying as well.
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Very beautiful. I liked *although this barely has anything to do with the poem* that it says forevermore throughout the poem, like nevermore, and it's by lady raven.
Besides that, I like the imagery and choice of words. Very moving and hopeful.
Also, beautiful.
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Aww I like that it is sweet and innocent and full of true pretty emotions.... You did a really nice job with this!
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Wow. Never felt this way before. Great poem, you have such obvious talent! Really this is excellent, such a good love/nature tie here. Freaking GREAT!!!!
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This is a very nice sentiment, and prettily written, but I feel that there is something.... stilted and off about it. I don't know what it is. Maybe it's the rhyme scheme, but something about it threw me out of the mood.
this stanza in particular threw me.
"We’ll run thru the stream
that once was frozen by the cold
thy heart melts with love
knowing you were sent to me from above"
I see where you were trying to go with it, and I think it's very close.
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