You are everything to me.
I wish that was what you could see.
You keep pushing me away.
You don't even know to this day.
How special you really are.
You keep telling every one you are used.
I know this is because you were abused.
Yet I'm here to hold your hand.
I'm here to make everything perfect and grand.
Trust me it's OK to cry on this shoulder.
Before it goes and gets and colder.
I don't want to ignore you.
I won't treat you like your crew.
Your not ready for love I know.
I'll listen to every complaint and every woe.
A friend by your side who is ever loyal.
I will treat you almost as if you were royal.
Everything to me you are.
Don't you dare go off to far.
You are my shining hope.
With you by my side I am able to cope.
Forever seems like a very long time.
But staying together should be no crime.
Your soul is my equal and my other half.
I know at this you might just laugh.
Yet I'm still here waiting.
Still taking all of that degrading.
Waiting for that time of fate.
When you just might make me your best mate.
Author notes
Uhm I suppose this is selection 1... and uh It is expressing how much my friend means to me even though he might not be very interested I think it could also kind of be a 14 selection too...
Written February 8th, 2005
A contest entry
- In a Fleshy Tomb, I am Buried Above Ground. by TaintedSyn.
300 points, ended March 29, 2005, 2 entries
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Great job, i like the rhyming.
The words and everything flows excellent, your and awesome poet.
This poem has alot of meaning too it, Great job.Please keep up the awesome work.I really will look forward to seeing more pieces by you. Thank you for sharing this amazing piece.I truly adored it. Keep up the excellent work, if i havent already said so!.
Sincerly,
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This is a sad love story, well described throughout with a deep expression of emotions!
Really excellent - I wouldn't change anything about it!
Sarah Louise Hudson
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Good - you're rhyming again.
However, I think this is too simplistic, and a bit soppy for me.
Perhaps I'm just a miserable old git (well, actually, I AM a miserable old git!)
NotevensureifI'maperson.
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well done!
great poem!! I really like this piece, the rhyming words and flow was excellent, your a great poet, this poem has a lot of meaning to it, well done. Keep up the amazing work I look forward to more pieces by you as usual!! xXxXx *Jordan** -
Ang this was great!! The rhyming was perfect and it was just beuatiful!Good luck with everything,your just great.
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Aww Ang you lost all your comments on this poem! Dang that really sucks a lot I'll comment here for you so you can feel better! OK? your writing is really good and I definatly liked this poem a lot so you keep up the good work and keep on writing and I will definatly read them and critique them all for you! Until later days Ang!
~Kit~
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