‘Tis bliss to be bewitch’d by love’s delight
E’re seeking naught but fanning of the flames,
My only want to ken thee, handsome knight,
Perchance to turn thine eye with rapturous games.
Yet, carefully, so tenderly, I step
Into the realm of lover’s whispered pleas,
lest I am left to wandering bereft,
Alone, bemoaning love’s oft icy breeze.
Still, cautiously, mine eyes are wont to roam
E’re fleshing out thy frame’s familiar sight,
Perfection from afar, e’re closer home,
To usher us to love’s unending night.
Yea, I will live to earn the lover’s part,
For such a love resides in mine own heart.
Author notes
Critique away! 
Written February 7th, 2005
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You need to post more poems. I came back to look at some more poems and there aren't any.
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That particular poem actually was for a contest, but I love Medieval English and it is what I hear in my head when I think of a sonnet. Come on, we just don't get to use words like perchance any more, now do we? I think Medieval English had a lilting quality to it that is missing in today's vernacular. I would like to try my hand at a modern Villanelle next. Anyway, thank you for your comment. I will return the favor.
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By the way, was there some particular reason you chose to write in Medieval English? Was it a contest requirement?
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I have to agree that it's a bonnie write. However, I am death on archaisms, so the thees and thous turn me off. If this were done in modern English, it would be a far better poem. However, I do like the poem otherwise. I just wish you'd fix it so it reads like modern English.
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Evocative of a time when fair maidens in frilly peasant dresses waited as noble men dueled with broad swords. It's enough of an accomplishment to pen a poem in native tongue, but to work in the flavor of Olde English, well, that's extraordinary! Congrats and good luck in the contest!
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WOW
That...was...AWESOME! I love it to death! It's too bad it's just a poem, and not something I can hug!
Great job, keep writing and God bless.
Love in Christ Jesus,
Liz -
i liked the use of old english. as a whole, it flowed well and was a good read. some rhymes seemed a little forced, but it was good. bravo.
willow -
awesome
Awesome! great write I loved the your words, the old english was used but placed in such a way that it was still very easy to read and beautifully put ... i really like it
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I Love this, The Old English was good two, i'm a mid evil fan as is, Good job -
Wow that was good! the old english was well put together and flowed very nicely! good job! i loved it truly!
My Deepest Regards,
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Nice, you used the old english nicely, and still was able to rhyme and put together the words well. Essential.
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"Tis bliss to be bewitch’d by love’s delight
E’re seeking naught but fanning of the flames,
My only want to ken thee, handsome knight,"
Wow! You have a very nice writing style. nicely done.
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'Critique away'??? Nah, not from me...I loved it!!! Very well written...Good luck in the contest, Selah...don't think you'll need it, though...
Wanda
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This was wonderful! Very well done! I enjoyed it very much. More than I expected! I loved the rhyming and use of words. It was so dreamy and detailed. I can't believe how well you can use old english in this day of age! This was remarkable...i hope you keep writing! Good luck.
Cheers!
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Thank you for the encouragment. Now, let's see if I can write anything else
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Splendid!
A perfect shakespearian sonnet! Iambs are right on, the rhyme scheme is right on... Concerning form this was well organized.
Context is even more baffling. Your phrasings and rare abilitiy to pen a natural old english, is awe-striking. The detail, emotion... Once again, William himself would have applauded you for this. Very tastefully used vocabulary. Bravo! I do believe you will take a trophy with this
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