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Remembering Lot's Wife

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~by Gregg Rowe~

Should I accept this fate?
I write the words, don’t charge a fee,
My poetry – is it that great?
A starving poet my Zeus made me –

I often wonder what’s the joke!
That holds me back so much,
Maybe, it is the stuff I smoke --
Insecurity -- is my crutch.

Whose sands these are I do not know --
They flowed through veins of life,
So words of mine drift on the shores --
Remembering Lot’s wife.


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Written February 6th, 2005

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    February 7, 2005
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    I liked the way that it read. It flowed well... and the picture and background are beautiful.


  • Jacki D
    February 6, 2005
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    What complex thoughts you have writen in this poem. And to those who send you hate ims are a little self rightous especially when claiming Christianity. As soon as I read the title to this I moreless knew your thought. But I assure you there is more love and respect on this site for you than hate. Your sexuality means nothing to me either way. I've told you this before that I believe there's many paths up that mountain, and the God I worship spoke of love w/o conditions. I can't understand how people can be so hypocritcal. Well you know what they say a hypocrite is someone whose not himself on sunday.
    Anyway you poem was a well thought out piece. And you shouldn't have to defend who you are....NEVER. Jacki

  • GatheringBlue
    February 6, 2005
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    This is great, the rhyming scheme was brilliant, and the rhythm was excellent. The only a few corrections: a comma after wonder, it's instead of is, and what's the joke that holds me back so much should loose the exclamation mark and adopt a question mark, but that's more stylistic than a mistake.


  • serene darkness
    February 6, 2005
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    excellent beat...i loved your word diction too!
    Lot's wife...hmm..ive heard that before...something pertaining to it anyhow...i think we read something in my world literature class

    Jen


  • masterblaster gold member
    February 6, 2005
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    Great write my friend, loved it. you have a magic way with words I feel quite jealous in a nice way, keep it up look forward to reading more of your work this was a masterpiece. all the best and just keep writing like this brilliant


  • angelica silver member
    February 6, 2005
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    Dear Gregg, shame on those who write those hurtful IM'S to you, I am with you 100%, your writings on homosexuals are always written with class.
    I love this also, you are such a gifted poet and a wonderful person, who could not love you, there are many here who do and surely they outweight the ones who crucify you. stand Tall Gregg, you are YOU and I wouldn't want you any other way Love your friend~Joan 's and 's to you
    Edited on Feb 06, 4:05 p.m. because ''.

  • listen
    February 6, 2005
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    yes,it is much clearer.lover it!


  • lordoftherings gold member
    February 6, 2005
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    I don't know how to explain this without giving away too much about myself and taking away from the reader their interpretation. Lot's wife looked back on the city of Sodom, and as we know it was a city of corruption with some men sleeping with some men, and when she looked back she turned into the pillar of salt for (a) disobeying God or ( for being a witness to the destruction of some men? (By the way, the Bible was written by men and this is a man's interpretation of the story of Lot and not G-d's). Anyways, yesterday I wrote a poem on homosexuality and got crucified for it with a vast amount of IMs (again, why do I write these controversial poem anyways -- ), so I was sitting upset all day over this and wonder how some people can write on heterosexuality and get away with it, but as soon as I write about homosexuality I get blasted (and we know who these people are on this website). So I started to think of my life as a poet, where the poet's life originally came from (Aristotle and Zeus) and then my life as a poet (not making a living from it) and then the death of the poet (which in my case, I have almost stopped writing poetry because of some of the hate mail I receive on my poems) and the only image that was strong enough was the image of Lot's wife! The Christianity of that line fits into the Zeus line and makes one wonder about the value of poetry now and how much it is worth over the generations since religion has become an important aspect of our every day living. Is this any clearer or more confusing?
    Edited on Feb 06, 2:54 p.m. because ''.


  • February 6, 2005
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    She looked back and turned to a pillar of salt -- likely a metaphor for getting on with your life, I imagine (though what happened with Lot and their daughters at the end of that chapter -- I'm not quite certain what that was a metaphor for)

    Have to giggle some at the allusion to insecurity stemming from various smokables. I think insecurity is more paralyzing that we give it credit for being -- and more ubiquitous, too. I feel comfortable at home, not worried about what the world thinks, or putting on a front, because I'm just not that interesting.

    Insecurity or regret? You can't move on .. you can't make yourself .. is it the looking back? Or is it simple unwillingness to try?


  • nobodygirl
    February 6, 2005
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    grand

    "I write the words, don’t charge a fee"

    I really loved that line. Something about it that I just fell in love with. This is a grand poem, you really have a way with words. I look forward to reading more of your poems. Keep up the good work. Thank you very much for sharing. Great use of metaphors too by the way. I wish you the best in your life and your work.

    au revoir..

    nobodygirl..


  • DryIce808
    February 6, 2005
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    good stuff

    I really enjoyed reading this Gregg. The imagery and word choice in this was fantastic.

    "Whose sands these are I do not know --
    They flowed through veins of life,
    So words of mine drift on the shores --
    Remembering Lot’s wife."

    This was brilliant. I loved the metaphors throughout this as well. Great job!


  • hugh wyles silver member
    February 6, 2005
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    Dear Gregg,
    ~~~
    Now I know I'm a bit of a dolt
    And this poem brought me up with a jolt.
    In your near-starving state
    here's advice for you, mate:
    Try licking a pillar of salt!
    ~~~
    A grand poem, Gregg, I applaud it.
    Regards, Hugh.


  • lordoftherings gold member
    February 6, 2005
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    crystaldust: You may call me Gregg and everything else you heart desires except BITCH, that is reserved my my drag queen friends , just funning with you. Thank you for your constructive critique on my poem and I will be looking for treasures in your library. Gregg
    Edited on Feb 06, 3:07 p.m. because ''.


  • crystaldust gold member
    February 6, 2005
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    crystaldust 06-02-05 17:12
    Brilliant write, lordoftherings, I love it. Zeus may not keep you in food, but he certainly bestowed greatness on you, even to the grains of salt which run through the verses. Touch of genius linking Zeus with the God of the Hebrews, but I don't see you being turned into a rigid block of anything. Much too flexible and aware of the depth of things. Shall be dipping into your site quite a lot as time goes by. (May I call you Gregg, by the way?)


  • Ancientson
    February 6, 2005
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    Splendid!

    This is very nice verse and a wonderful image all in a fantastic background.
    Two thumbs up!

  • a-crazed-hobo
    February 6, 2005
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    The flow is liquid, and the rhyme doesn't make the rhythm; you did really well there, I think. Also, I like your combinaion of both mythological and biblication allusions. Though I'm no avid reader of the Holy Bible, I do enjoy the story of Lot and his wife as they fled Sodom. You did a wonderful job expressing emotion and your words are so easily readable; fantastic job with this piece.


  • Annessia
    February 6, 2005
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    This flowed very well, I loved how you braught Zeus into the picture! I really enjoyed reading this poem! Great job, keep it up...Happy Valentines Day!


  • April Renee
    February 6, 2005
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    i dont know the story of Lot's wife...but i like this. nicely penned. flow well. great job. was well worth the read.

    Blu


  • Butterfly Genie
    February 6, 2005
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    amazing

    Wow, this was very very very breath taking. oh, and I really love your choice in the background. It's awesome. Truly, amazing. I havent seen anything like it yet. I really like you title for this and I like how you brought Zeus into this. I never really thought of using a mythical god in poetry, but I reckon I can see how it would work! This was amazing. Wonderful job! Blessed be.
    Love ~ Jess ~


  • leo2
    February 6, 2005
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    I can relate to this piece in several ways. First as a fellow writer I know what is like to be blessed/cursed with the need to write and desire to be read/accepted. Secondly, I have a few crutches of mine own. I won't go into that now..lol. And lastly
    I know the story of Lot's wife. Sometimes it seems you bring the words to life only to have them drift aimlessly on to the shores of land forgotten or worse yet turn into a pillar of salt.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • senza
    February 6, 2005
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    Nice job this poem gives a mystical and a bit freakinout atmosphere.
    Though i dont c y u put thta picture!
    Nice poem, good lines, great selection of words.
    Your worst fear,
    Lady anairO


  • lordoftherings gold member
    February 6, 2005
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    Am8ur: Thank you, the spell check didn’t pick up on that grammatical mistake because originally I had holding but dropped the -ing because of an extra syllable and forgot to correct that's so thank you for noticing that mistake. Gregg
    Edited on Feb 06, 3:56 because ''.


  • Am8ur
    February 6, 2005
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    i read back over it, i must learn to take my time when reading pieces, i can only notice one mistake in line six that's holds me back so much Til


  • lordoftherings gold member
    February 6, 2005
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    Addivum: I like your thoughts on your critique but I would like to leave as is, the first stanza speaks of a life as a writer, the contemplation of the life of a poet in stanza 2 and in the 3rd stanza, the death of the poet...the punch lies in the last line since Zues is mentioned in the first stanz and a story from christianity is closing the poem!


  • lordoftherings gold member
    February 6, 2005
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    An8ur: Could you please come back and point out these spelling mistakes in my poem. I have run it through two spell checks and have found none, so it would be interesting to know what you consider misspelled! Gregg


  • addivinum
    February 6, 2005
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    I like it, but to me it seems like the last line is missing something. I'm expecting a punch, I would say to throw a couple more syllables into that last line and jazz it up a little bit, and you'll have yourself a great peice of work.

    It's cool other than that. May be a little bit over my head, but I like your style.


  • Am8ur
    February 6, 2005
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    this was pretty good, however i will take the time to point out that there are a few spelling mistakes. the flow of this piece was pretty good, the imagery was excellent. keep up the good work. til

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