Can't you just let my past be forgotten?
Because I need you to help me make it through these days,
All I do is drink and get high
Before, you were there to save me
You were my only guide.
Then you left, rumors askew in your mind,
I need you so much now,
To hold me and say it'll be alright
'Cause this hurts deeper then I thought it did
It couldn't heal with time,
and neither could I...
Still stuck on when you left my life
Over a year ago...
My heart remains broken
My love still hides
Without any care
All I do is get high
To escape the memories of you...
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Written February 2nd, 2005
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Nice
I want this poem. I like it alot. I can relate. -
sadness
v.v that's so sad. it sucks when you lose someone. (what i get from it is death as opposed to breaking up--but thats just me)but i've been in a situation when someone disowned me (by this time he's done it a second time to get back at me and in the end he certainly did) and i just laid there and cried. the kind of crying where you open your mouth as though you're going to scream but no sounds arise. yeah it sucks o.o;
anyways if you'd like someone to talk to about anything and everything with i like friends ^^ (yeah we can talk about your awesome poetry and the fact that i used to get high and it seems you do still)
take care of yourself!
~Alexandra -
this is a great poem, thanks for entering my contest.and i know how it feels to be hurt and have to hide it from someone that you still love them, im in the situation right now. greaat job!!
BruisedAndBroken -
Hmm, I'm digging this. I know how it feels to be hurt in a relationship. I hope all goes well, and just remember that things do happen for a reason. The poem was good, I loved your word use at the beginning, and I loved how you closed the poem up. However, it does feel like you kind of rushed to get to the end. So, I'll just say to let your poem evolve naturally and it would be a whole lot better...though, gosh now it sounds like I'm dissing it...I'm not. I'll shut up.
Good luck in this contest, I thought you did a wonderful job.
Miseria.
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